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StevenS
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0 posted 2006-03-11 07:51 PM



He promised her a love song,
he promised her the moon.
What he gave her was a broken heart,
his love had no tune.
And in the misty morning,
with no tears left to fall,
she reaches for the telephone,
and gives my love a call.

She asks me for a coffee,
just the sholder of a friend.
A moment of warm embrace,
then it's back to him again.
She asks me to comfort her,
she say's I make her smile.
She really don't want to bother me,
she'll be gone in just a while.

He promised her forever,
he promised her true love.
But everything he promised her,
he knows nothing of.
He gave her a mansion,
with satin pillows to cry upon,
and jaded halls to echo,
her feeling of alone.

© Copyright 2006 Steven E. Stone - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2006-03-11 08:59 PM


Is this one of your songs, Steven?  Sure has the rhythm for one, and the sad/romantic theme.  Much enjoyed!  
The Lady
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2 posted 2006-03-11 10:51 PM




"He gave her a mansion,
with satin pillows to cry upon,
and jaded halls to echo,
her feeling of alone"


Oh my... it's lonely and lovely.

StevenS
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3 posted 2006-03-12 12:32 PM


Thank You Martie, I can sing it. :-)

Thank You Lady, I'm glad you think so. :-)

Rainbowdust
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4 posted 2006-03-12 05:21 AM


Liked this Steven. If only.....

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

nn
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5 posted 2006-03-12 05:51 AM


It does sound very nice, very well written
Klassy Lassy
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6 posted 2006-03-12 06:50 AM


Love: rarely uncondiditonal, an enigma at times, a blessing when it happens, always a teacher....and friends are often angels unaware.

~ Klassy ~


Deep_Inside
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7 posted 2006-03-12 07:05 AM


i really enjoyed reading this good job.
Magnus
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8 posted 2006-03-12 08:33 AM


well done,  such a story...sung over and
over many times.

Sunshine
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9 posted 2006-03-12 08:45 AM



Steven, I can hear the strains
and strings of both the piano and
guitar...

a song, indeed.




StevenS
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10 posted 2006-03-12 10:05 AM


Thank you Rainbowdust, If only...indeed!

Thanks for the read nn, I'm glad you enjoyed! :-)

Thank you Klassy, true,true,true,true,and true, now I'm really confused. :-)

Thanks Deep_inside, a story that many understand. Glad you enjoyed.

Thanks for the read Magnus, and no doubt will be till the end of time. Or untill we all get love right the first time which ever comes first. :-)

Thank You Sunshine, I will be traveling to Nashville soon to cut a demo of a song. I don't sing or play very well so I have to hire singers and musicians. This is all new to me and I have found it to be very expensive. But what the hay? You only live once...I think!

suthern
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11 posted 2006-03-13 02:45 PM


This does feel like a song... and so many people sing it... to their sorrow. *S*

Beautiful write!!

LeeJ
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12 posted 2006-03-13 03:05 PM


you cannot give what you've never known...and people compensate for whatever their idea is of love...

tremendous write

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