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icequeen
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since 2001-12-09
Posts 633
FL USA

0 posted 2006-03-09 09:59 PM



When the light came through
your lies
the impact was so great
it broke her heart
to tell you
she’s not your little girl
anymore
All her work from then
until now
has been to prove
you wrong…
and she thought
that she could fly
but you cut her wings
so often
she never made it
off the ground
you walked on
her dreams and then
expected her to
love you
because you gave
her life
when what you did
was pirate her memories
leaving her with nothing
to treasure

© Copyright 2006 Caroline Rush Markham - All Rights Reserved
The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
1 posted 2006-03-09 11:50 PM


"when what you did
was pirate her memories
leaving her"

You have a great empathy for children Caroline. I enjoyed this piece very much.

poettothecars
Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093
New Zealand
2 posted 2006-03-10 12:11 PM


works of inspiration and works to ponder
well presented

a poet who cares

latearrival
Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
3 posted 2006-03-10 05:16 AM


Very good. martyjo
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2006-03-10 06:48 AM


well written, the sadness is felt

"was pirate her memories
leaving her with nothing
to treasure"

M

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
5 posted 2006-03-10 06:55 AM



The mistreatment of children breaks my heart ~ as it so apparently does yours.

~ An exceptionally moving write from your compassionate heart.


EA

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187
Oregon
6 posted 2006-03-10 08:54 AM


I acquiesce in silence...this unfolds before me in a similar scenario.  You've penned perfectly the bitter reaction to a shattered hero.     Sad


Karen



bubblesleave
Member
since 2006-03-04
Posts 197
Bloomington, IN
7 posted 2006-03-10 10:02 AM


Very nice!


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