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Quad_dune
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0 posted 2006-03-07 09:13 PM



The moon was out the stars were bright.
We laid on the ground in the dark moon light.

You lay by my side as we look at the stars.
Away from the city and the noisy cars.

Cocoa and cookies through the night.
Till we awaken to dawns bright light.

So up an atom and away we go.
Back to our home and the city flow.

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1 posted 2006-03-07 09:18 PM


grinning at that ending
'up an atom'

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2 posted 2006-03-07 10:00 PM


Do you know what first came to my mind when I read this poem?  It was the movie starring Mandy Moore called A WALK TO REMEMBER.  There is a scene in this moving just like what you wrote, where they had hot cocoa and cookies and laid under the stars and just enjoyed each others' company until the morning.  Nothing seductive done, just enjoying each others' company.  This is a beautiful poem.
Sheri Adams

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jody5
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3 posted 2006-03-07 10:58 PM


very nice poem.  I felt I was there.

huggs Kim


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4 posted 2006-03-07 11:26 PM



A peaceful picture. I enjoyed it.


aujussy wolf
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5 posted 2006-03-09 11:27 PM


amazing write !

In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil-the adv

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