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They Three Villanelle
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They Three Villanelle |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
What are three poets gathered to do With too much time for their nattering? They must pen a line of more than two. I imagine them with candle more than few Burning slightly enhancing the gathering What are three poets gathered to do? When spells of rhymes outwardly spew The word are more than a smattering They must pen a line of more than two. So their cauldron minds make a stew From conversations gently muttering, What are three poets gathered to do? With sleepy eyes the write words now new Each picks up for another sputtering They must pen a line of more than two. So when the next day does ensue We have a sestina from their gathering What are three poets gathered to do They must pen a line of more than two. Gloom The form is originally French and appeared in English during the later 1800's. It is 19 lines long, but only uses two rhymes, while also repeating two lines throughout the poem. The first five stanzas are triplets, and the last stanza is a quatrain such that the rhyme scheme is as follows: "aba aba aba aba aba abaa." The tricky part is that the 1st and 3rd lines from the first stanza are alternately repeated such that the 1st line becomes the last line in the second stanza, and the 3rd line becomes the last line in the third stanza. The last two lines of the poem are lines 1 and 3 respectively, making a rhymed couplet |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
This was WAY cool. I think I saw two typo's but filled them in in my head. I love this. My daughter was an English & Lit teacher and gave me an anthology on poetry that would be a good challenge if only... Anyway, I am impressed and really enjoyed this piece. Thanks also for the little "prof" note at the bottom.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. [This message has been edited by Larry C (03-06-2006 09:12 PM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very much enjoyed the poetry and poetry lesson Prof. Nicely penned.  |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I like this very much. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Larry On review I only notice the one But these old eyes are so sharp, Pleased you enjoyed and why don’t you take up the challenge I’ll write three if you’ll write one Thank you, Gentle Spirit Always a pleasure to see your response Thank you, Lady For taking the time to read and respond Gloom |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Prof, I like your challenge but have two issues. The first is the biggest - I'm working too many 12 hour days. The second is lame - I'm not online at home so find little opportunity to write what I know let alone try to be collegiate. P.S. Noted for future project though. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This was wonderful! I know this is a hard form to write and you sure did it well. I sent it along to three poets I know that whipped up a mean sestina during some spare time  Nice going. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
enjoyed the read |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Spare time? Who's got spare time??? Not I - I'm hard at work... absorbing this grande villanelle... Thankya D...  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
These are not easy and you did it very well. It sounds like a gathering in Pennsylvania last weekend. This gives me inspiration to try this form again. Thank you Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Dear Poet... not an easy form to write but one you do with such grace This brings a smile to my face today as it refreshes fond memories of three friends gathered and inspired by each other's company. Thank you for that, and this Ruth |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Dear Larry ( Poet and Friend), Ah the constraints of time, How it limits the mind Making us leave bits of life behind, Like grapes left on the vine, But you need to out smart time’s shadow, You can do it you’re a smart fellow. The Villanelle is just the form for you And really quite easy to do While working just jot down lines two That can find rhymes more than a few And set them on the page in position Then slowly add your inspiration One line at a time Over time And you’ll find As you add lines one by one The poem will soon be done. Thank you, Mysteria, Pleased to have you pass it along, But I find this form fairly easy You try too Thank you, ecrivan, Pleased you enjoyed Thank you, Liz Yes, please try I’m sure a poet of your talent will make one delightful Thank you, Hoot, The pleasure is mine to please Most of my poetry is not suited for pleasure. Gloom |
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