Another Day - Sestina by Liz Santos, hoot_owl_rn, & Nan

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Nan

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0 posted 2006-03-04 10:34 PM

What else would three silly poets do with a weekend together?  They'd collaborate to write a sestina, of course...

You folks will have to figure out which two stanzas belong to whom, though...

With Love to all - Elizabeth Santos, Ruth (hoot_owl), and Nan

She came to find a memory of the past
To warm her heart with smiles and an embrace.
Not even our almighty God could change
The course that she had chosen on that day.
There are some things more mighty than the sea;
The undertows of friendship’s purity.

He lived life fast and not with purity,
Then found himself betrayed by his own past.
So many hearts he’d broke, cast to the sea,
He swore that he would never love embrace.
But fate had other plans for him that day;
The tides were turned and this time things would change.

He’d never thought the course of life could change;
But friendships born of trust and purity
Rescind the dark travails of yesterday.
Thence times of doleful solitude were past,
Redressed by join of mutual embrace
Shared tidings as the ebbing azure sea.

There on a cliff beside a roaring sea,
So many years ago another change
Had started with an innocent embrace.
That first encounter with the purity
Of youthful love he squandered in the past,
Because of what she saw one tragic day.

It started out like any other day.
Her morning walk along that tranquil sea
Where sea gulls echoed out songs of her past,
And falling mist hung thick neath winds of change,
As dreams of love in all its purity
Died with his reckless ill-timed caught embrace.

The semblance of inopportune embrace
Effaced her yearning hopes of love that day.
No longer rapt in trusting purity,
Her dreams upon the waves had swept to sea.
But how the waning tides of time can change
Two hearts who long to find their cherished past.

Again the cliffs embrace love by the sea.
Another day, and yet another change
Finds future’s purity tied to the past.

Martie

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1 posted 2006-03-04 10:41 PM

Wonderful!! Standing ovation!! Are you guys together having fun? I am so jealous...I want to be there!! Photos?

to all!

Mysteria

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2 posted 2006-03-04 10:45 PM

I am so jealous! Not of you writing a Sestina, but that you are having fun without moi! This was beautiful and thanks for fulfilling my request too

In this order, I would guess it was written in this order: Liz, Ruth, Nan, if you wrote this as 2, 2, 2? You will have to tell us eventually ladies. Darn, you are eating Boston Chicken I just know you are, and I am not there - pooie.

The poem was lovely like the ladies who wrote it.

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3 posted 2006-03-04 10:58 PM

No way, Mysteria. Rescinding dark trevails can belong to no one but Nan.....Liz, Nan, Hoot.

...and anyway you read it, it's a beauty (written by three of the same).

I miss you all

Mysteria

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4 posted 2006-03-04 11:04 PM

Yup you are right Michael.

This thence part is definitely a Nanism.
Thence times of doleful solitude were past,
Redressed by join of mutual embrace
Shared tidings as the ebbing azure sea.
I keep forgetting that she speaks plain old english around me.

Sunshine

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5 posted 2006-03-05 10:11 AM

Oh, the fun! Can't I just enjoy the fact that you all collaborated...in person?

Continue to let the good times roll, ladies, and yes, I, too, hope we see a few photos?

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6 posted 2006-03-05 10:26 AM

Nan
I don't think I'd care to know
But would go where this wind would blow.
My three lovelies and for each a

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2006-03-05 10:27 AM

Three for the price of one! I couldn't pass by a poem penned by three of pip's illustrious ~ and kindred! ~ spirits!

~ and the tale was written in fine poetic form!

I applaud you all! ~ and have a great time together!

Linda

Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 2006-03-05 02:39 PM

Thank you all for reading! No one has guessed who wrote what. Hint: They told me I twisted the story, but it was rather dry up to that point, don't you think?
Anyway, Nan missed the bus this morning, but we caught that same bus two bus stops later about 20 miles up the road.
Thank you Nan for coming to see me and Ruth for driving such a distance, and then driving home the next day after dancing the night away in my living room. (And was THAT an eye opener! They both got the moves. Step aside, JL!)
This reunion meant so much to me, more than you can possibly know
Missed Sharon, though, and Martie, and LeeJ, and Denise, and...... Rain check?
Love you all
Loz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (03-05-2006 03:18 PM).]

Martie

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9 posted 2006-03-05 08:05 PM

Yes...raincheck!! Now what about those photos? I know you guys took some...give it up!!

Did ya play scrabble?

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10 posted 2006-03-05 08:26 PM

Very well done Ladies...and I am certain
that it was a most enjoyable moment for
each of you...

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11 posted 2006-03-05 09:50 PM

Wow! This is fantastic.

bubblesleave
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12 posted 2006-03-05 10:03 PM

Standing in awe, am I!

"Bubbles"

Mysteria

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13 posted 2006-03-05 10:46 PM

Ahah! It matters not, but I think now it is Ruth, Nan, and you ended it right Lizzie? Nan missed the bus

but she got home okay as I just talked to her before pumpkin time.

Next time - it all for one, and one for all. We have to make a time then we all go, and dance barefoot in your grass - it's a deal!

The Lady
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14 posted 2006-03-06 12:32 PM

What fun! It's great!

Nan

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15 posted 2006-03-06 08:04 AM

Thank you for stopping by, poet friends...

I admit to the one stanza in question (i.e. the dark travails one)... You've got me on that.

The final tercet was a joint effort.  That only leaves five to go.

And we did play one game of Scrabble, which Ruth won (but she wouldn't let me play "finky" either).  Believe it or not, though, we didn't take pictures.  I left my camera at home and happened to miss the most exquisite crystalized forest photo day. I was bumming big time.

We had a wonderfully relaxing time.  Till my next escape...

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16 posted 2006-03-06 01:37 PM

Ladies, how much fun and how I wish I had been there. Nan, it is so good to see you in front. I do miss your writing. Earth Angel and I were talking about the visit we had with Sharon and also Titia.

You must all come to the mountains one day and relax in my beauty.

Hugs to you all, Marti

Every blade of grass has its angel
that bends over it and whispers,
"grow, grow."

Martie

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17 posted 2006-03-06 01:40 PM

Nan..."finky" is every bit as good a word as "quaff", I think!! But then you guys let me cheat. Thanks again for that!

Mysteria

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18 posted 2006-03-06 02:19 PM

I am a "finky" 'cause I am about to tell you they cheat!

Misty Lilacs!! I just realized that is you Marti, how dumb am I? That visit was the best ever - a Red Socks game - like how kewl was that? My son went to Boston to a game and got the exact same pictures as I took, and we have them framed in one frame side by side.

Next time we have to get our act together you gals, and all buy red hats or blue hats, or some hats the same, and get together - but I say VEGAS? Whatca think of that for a place to meet? I am off to watch Mz. Toontown.com this afternoon, but later tonight I plan to email you all and get you committed to a trip there for fun. See ya!

LeeJ
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19 posted 2006-03-06 02:20 PM

whoa, this was amazing...
you do well together, and Nan, I believe this is the first of yours I've ever read. Why don't you write more?????

this....
He lived life fast and not with purity,
Then found himself betrayed by his own past.
So many hearts he’d broke, cast to the sea,
He swore that he would never love embrace.
But fate had other plans for him that day;
The tides were turned and this time things would change.

and this

The semblance of inopportune embrace
Effaced her yearning hopes of love that day.
No longer rapt in trusting purity,
Her dreams upon the waves had swept to sea.
But how the waning tides of time can change
Two hearts who long to find their cherished past.

this reminded me of the painting, the woman on the beach, watching the sinking ship, and this to me, describes that painting.

Marvelous write...

sorry to have missed you guys, perhaps next time...happy to hear you had a great time...

What, no scrabble?

hoot_owl_rn
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20 posted 2006-03-06 09:53 PM

I can't even begin to tell you what a priveledge it was to write this with these two awesome poets

It's one thing to read their writes but something totally different to actually watch them as they compose the lines.
What a wonderful visit indeed. Liz, thank you so much for your hospitality and Nan, for the challenge of that Scrabble game ( even though you tried to make up a word of your own

. I miss you both again already!
Thank you all here for your wonderful comments on this piece but you are all under the assumption that we each wrote two consecutive stanzas...hmmmmm

Hugs

Ruth

I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S

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21 posted 2006-03-06 10:45 PM

I really like this. Wonderful work, thanks for the pleasure. Cheers - Ed

“True absurdism is not less but more real than reality”
- John Simon

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