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Sister (Masquerade, I hope.)
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Sister (Masquerade, I hope.) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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sipping water from a lost Spode cup she was a negative an absence a hole driven in on itself folding silver squares chasing dragons she lay in places even sirens would not attend her red haired women dreamed her dancing in diamond dust hand on a cutting hip dying again and again and finally dying again [This message has been edited by The Lady (03-04-2006 12:00 AM).] |
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Kathy Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 153 |
My...this is so saddly beautiful... "she lay in places even sirens would not attend her red haired women dreamed her dancing in diamond dust hand on a cutting hip dying again and again" I've been there...tried to forget...yet... Thanks for reminding me, I needed it. Hugs, Kathy and finally dying again |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Exquisite poem, as usual (do you ever write anything that isn't a masterpiece?). I am not even going to try to guess who it is because I am hopeless at this - I don't think I have got any right of all the poets who responded to this challenge, although I see it afterwards when all is revealed. - Owl |
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desert-spike Member
since 2006-02-01
Posts 194TX/USA |
That's a fantastically visual write. My only regret is that there wasn't more of it! |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Beautiful Lady! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I've been there...tried to forget...yet... Thanks for reminding me, Thanks for the read and the reply Kathy. Hugs to you. Diana, I appreciate your wonderful words. I am afraid no one will guess who the masquerade is...  Thanks, desert-spike. Thank you Steven. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady It's so well done, but I don't know who...perhaps it's time for you to tell us? |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you Martie. I think you are right. It tried so hard to write itself like Dark Stranger but in the end it is only a shadow of a shadow. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Going back to read again, I do see the DS in your imagery. I think he will be pleased. You best send him the link! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you Martie.  The link is on the way. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Fair Lady..enjoyed her through your eyes and am blessed to have had your thoughts for moment..in other words..(WOW) Thanks |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I may not know whose style you are emulating, but I DO know that whomever I might suggest, would be complimented by such a fine piece of writing in their honour!   EA |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you so much Dark Stranger!!  And I am greatly complimented by you EA. Thank you.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady, Friction on the edge of combustion. I like it. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you sir. I appreciate your response. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
This is exquisitely beautiful. I'm officially in awe of you! Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Oh my Caroline! You have knocked my socks off. Thank you. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lady~ Just so you know ... I KNEW BEFORE I read the replies ... so, you were SPOT ON !!!! Wonderful to know I 'unmasked' your ink~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Hooray! I am so glad you recognized him Marge. Good eye! Thanks for letting me know. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Unmasking ... what a word for this masquerade! I loved this. The poem is better than a shadow of a shadow and it is a great read. Everything is there. You did a fantastic imitation of Daark's style.  I'm sure he enjoyed this terrific poem.~ klassy ~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you Klassy!  |
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