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vlraynes
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0 posted 2006-03-03 12:57 PM


I am the warrior
reluctant
my dagger lacks the
will to kill

I fought the fight
whole-heartedly
yet here I lie, all
tattered... torn...
bruised beyond
repair, I fear the
end of
this... of
me
is near

I fought...
I lost... and
no one saw the
bleeding 'neath the
armor... thin... the
fatal wounds
inflicted by the
aim of

friendly fire...

It matters not...
what time forgot
today the truth shines

vividly

so, celebrate your
victory

here lies the warrior

dead

you win...

© Copyright 2006 Vicky L. Raynes - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-03-03 01:03 AM


Oh, not dead at all, I think -- though a solid hit can make you think you're done for. I think there's a pattern in the way things happen, and one shot doesn't make a war -- especially if it only wounds.

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MUSEconnieSEconnie
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2 posted 2006-03-03 02:23 AM


THIS IS A VERY AMAZING WRITE.  I WOULD HAVE POSTED IT IN A LITTLE DIFFERENTLY
BUT I WOULD NOT ELIMINATE OR CHANGE OR ADD A WORD. I AM SURE YOU HAVE YOUR OWN POSTING STYLE AS MOST OF US DO.  ERGO, BRAVO!!!!!

LOVE LIGHT LAUGHTER

I AM BLIND/I POST IN CAPS. FORGIVE IF THEY ARE UNCOMFORTABLE. A VOICE READER HELPS ME READ POSTS.  MY SCR-NAME POSTED WRONG, IT IS MUSEconnieHUES

MUSEconnieSEconnie
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3 posted 2006-03-03 02:25 AM


PS
YOU LOOK SO MUCH LIKE A YOUNGER ME THAT IT IS SCARY!!!!!!


I AM BLIND/I POST IN CAPS. FORGIVE IF THEY ARE UNCOMFORTABLE. A VOICE READER HELPS ME READ POSTS.  MY SCR-NAME POSTED WRONG, IT IS MUSEconnieHUES

[This message has been edited by MUSEconnieSEconnie (03-03-2006 11:25 PM).]

latearrival
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4 posted 2006-03-03 02:28 AM


You really should post more of your work.I always enjoy what you write. martyjo
iliana
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5 posted 2006-03-03 03:45 AM


Missed reading you lately, Vicky.  This is so potent!  (and much appreciated from my perspective)   ....jo
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6 posted 2006-03-03 02:11 PM


It's hard for me to get past your title, having lost a friend in a 'friendly fire' incident. But somehow, methinks this isn't about that kind of battle.
We just have to stand our ground sometimes, even if it means getting shot down. Brava, for it sounds like you gave it 'your last shot' so-to-speak.

vlraynes
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7 posted 2006-03-03 02:23 PM



I apologize, Kacy...

I meant no disrespect with my title choice...

and I am sincerely sorry for the loss of your friend...


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8 posted 2006-03-03 03:14 PM


Enjoyed the heartfelt read. I enojed this best:

"It matters not...
what time forgot
today the truth shines"

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9 posted 2006-03-03 05:00 PM


I believe the current phrase used in military jargon is "Blue on Blue". An interesting read Vicky

Andrew

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10 posted 2006-03-03 05:42 PM


Vicky,
An excellent write.

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11 posted 2006-03-03 06:11 PM


Vicky, I applaud you for this outstanding write.  For some reason the quote came to mind, Never give up, if you give up you have lost everything you have hoped to gain, but if you keep trying, you are already winning.  
Outstanding hon.  Check your email, also.

seek the flame within yourself
and let your soul be cleansed by
the fire of love.  Axel Ekenstierna

vlraynes
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12 posted 2006-03-03 06:50 PM


Thank you, everyone...

I appreciate each and every one of your
comments more than you know...

and Donna?...

My e-mail seems to be temporarily down at the moment
(which is something that rarely happens)but I'll check it
as soon as I have access again...

Thanks, again, all...

The Lady
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13 posted 2006-03-05 12:23 PM




Excellent work.



Martie
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14 posted 2006-03-05 12:36 PM



dgvarner
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15 posted 2006-03-05 12:40 PM


"so, celebrate your
victory

here lies the warrior

dead

you win..."

Not much of a 'victory', this...

As always, I enjoy reading your writing..You are a wonderful poet

hugs, g

"We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched."  Lord Byron

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16 posted 2006-03-06 03:20 PM


I am the warrior
reluctant

After a childhood that held a lifetime of controversy... reluctance is a mild term for me stepping into any fray. *S*

But... the victory is in the trying... in finding the courage to do the right thing... even if that's small consolation to the mourners.

Excellent write!!

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17 posted 2006-03-07 02:49 AM


Methinks there's more to this than meets the eye   

and then He created the horse...

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