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Jack Straw
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since 2006-03-02
Posts 70


0 posted 2006-03-02 07:13 PM


US

Us we live in ignorance
Us we scramble for a cent
Us we ride in fancy cars
Us we forgot about the stars
in all their gorgeous might
we've forgotten what is right
given power to things trite
in this everlasting night

Us we value money
It really is quite stunning
How commercialism has grown
It makes me groan and phone
in to a distant land
with inquiry and a plan
you have the power at hand
say you want change for man

there's no need to fuss
and no need to cuss
can't you see it's too late
for Us.

Now we need but a few acres
Do you realize what's at stake here
As long as Us leaves us alone
Simpler societies we shall clone.

work in progress.. I'd like to add a stanza in between the 1st and 2nd describing Us.

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MUSEconnieSEconnie
Member
since 2006-02-28
Posts 74
california
1 posted 2006-03-03 02:29 AM


THIS IS A VERY INTERESTING WRITE.  I WILL BE GLAD TO REVIEW IT WHEN YOU ARE FINISHED.
GREAT SUBJECT MATTER. INOVATED STYLE TOO!
LOVE LIGHT LAUGHTER

Jack Straw
Member
since 2006-03-02
Posts 70

2 posted 2006-03-23 09:18 PM


US

Us we live in ignorance
Us we scramble for a cent
Us we ride in fancy cars
Us we forgot about the stars
in all their gorgeous might
we've forgotten what is right
given power to things trite
in this long overlooked night

Why does Us boss everyone around
Why does Us create so many frowns
with so much oppression abound
it keeps me down to the ground

I hate it down here
I grab for a beer
to the courts I appear
and I cower in fear

I try to fly
up in the bountiful skies
I wish I could fly so high
but can't so I only sigh
back to thinking of our demise

Us we value money
It really is quite stunning
How commercialism has grown
It makes me groan and phone
in to a distant land
with inquiry and a plan
you have the power at hand
say you want change for man

there's no need to fuss
and no need to cuss
can't you see it's too late
for Us.

Now we need but a few acres
Do you realize what's at stake here
As long as Us leaves us alone
Simpler societies we shall clone.


revisions 3/23/2006

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