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Leaving you.. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA 
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Leaving you was hard I wanted you to say stay our time is too short it felt right for us today I thought you knew but if you did you couldn’t throw your voice into the solid hush of the second It gaped between us like a crevasse I could hear your don’t go echo in your eyes I went anyway I didn’t want you to trip stumble and fall on the words you couldn’t give away I’m sure you couldn’t take the drop without remembering and finding history all over again Leaving you was hard I wanted you to say stay but you were afraid it would feel right… |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Great observation and thought process of a precious moment...thank you.. Goldenrose. Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Oh, thanks for stopping by to read  Ahhh....yes.. it is always hard to leave him. He is the home of my heart, for sure, and it is always a long ride back to where I sleep (or mostly don't sleep!) at night. Thanks again! Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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MUSEconnieSEconnie Member
since 2006-02-28
Posts 74california |
THIS POEM IS VERY WELL RENDERED. CONGRATS ON THE AWESOME WRITE. I HAVE BEEN SMACK DAB IN THE MIDDLE OF THIS STORY...LATELY! HE CAME HOME. THAT'S BETTER...AT LEAST FOR NOW. WE'LL SEE. IT DOEN'T ALWAYS WORK DOES IT? EVEN WHEN THE LOVE IS REAL. I WILL SEND YOU A POEM THAT HAPPENED BEFORE HE RETURNED. I THINK YOU MIGHT RELATE.  LOVE CONNIE I AM BLIND/I POST IN CAPS. FORGIVE IF THEY ARE UNCOMFORTABLE. A VOICE READER HELPS ME READ POSTS. MY SCR-NAME POSTED WRONG, IT IS MUSEconnieHUES |
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bubblesleave Member
since 2006-03-04
Posts 197Bloomington, IN |
"I went anyway I didn’t want you to trip stumble and fall on the words you couldn’t give away" You are a talent. Sharon |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You express yourself so well! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms Ice...such are the wings of woman when she flees winter enjoyed your art ms |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I could hear your don’t go echo in your eyes" ~ Uniquely expressive!  EA |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lovee, for all of us has so many twists and turns...some so very small and inconsequential....others...like the earth on our shoulders... |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
CONNIE - THANKS SO MUCH DEAR - YOU ARE RIGHT - IT DOESN'T ALWAYS WORK OUT - THIS ONE DID BUT IN ITS OWN WAY. WE WERE MARRIED ONCE UPON A TIME BUT FOUND THAT A FEW MILES BETWEEN US KEEPS HIM SANE HA HA HA HA DO SEND ME YOUR POEM - I'D LOVE TO READ IT! HUGS!!! Bubbles - thanks so much - glad you like the poem. Its so nice of you to stop by and read Iliana - thank you... I have horrible writer's block - about 2 years now. Hopefully my pen is about to thaw! Stranger - as you are one of my poet idols, I am humbled. Thank you  EA - thanks for reading.. I admire your writing greatly. Magnus- your insight is perfection. I suppose that is why you write so well. Can you email me some of that insight?? LoL Hugs to you! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Caroline, Welcome to Passions. You write with eloquence and such heart. A pleasure to read, even the hardest of truths. TD |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Caroline, welcome to Passions. I'm sorry for not replying to your beautiful poetry sooner, time has not shown me much favor lately for reading or writing. This is a touching write, and one I have known well myself. Nicely done. Enoyed your art here ma'am. seek the flame within yourself |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
icequeen, Sorry I missed your entrance, but this is a gem I'm glad I found! I hope you enjoy your stay with us. I've found it so rewarding. I think you will, too. "I went anyway I didn’t want you to trip stumble and fall on the words you couldn’t give away" Unselfish love at its best; walking away is so difficult! Enjoyed your poetry. miscellanea |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Outstanding work Caroline! More please. |
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