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JesusChristPose
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since 2005-06-21
Posts 777
Pittsburgh, Pa

0 posted 2006-03-02 05:52 PM



You could stab me with a thousand knives
Then bleed me 'til the hearst arrives
You could twist my mind in many ways
Then leave it tangled in a daze
You could torture me
And that's for sure
But still it's you
That I adore

You could color me until I'm blue
Then look right through my anguished hue
You could spit my feelings on the floor
Then ask me to provide some more
You could misuse me
And that is true
But still I want
To be with you

You could rape me with your words of hate
Then watch my heart disintegrate
You could pierce my soul with deadly stress
Then laugh as I become a mess
You could do all this
And that I know
But even still
I love you so

(Revised)


"If this grand panaorama before me is what you call God... then God is not dead."

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Edward Grim
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since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina
1 posted 2006-03-02 05:58 PM


Very cool Jesus.

(I've always wanted to say that).

But seriously, nice writing. I like your tone.   Cheers   - Ed

“True absurdism is not less but more real than reality”
- John Simon

Marsha
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
2 posted 2006-03-03 08:56 PM


JCP darling man this is one amazing piece from you, and haven't we all been there.

This really is an excellent poem the structure and phrasing are absolutely spot on

Take care
Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy
x x

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

JesusChristPose
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since 2005-06-21
Posts 777
Pittsburgh, Pa
3 posted 2006-03-03 10:30 PM


Mr. Grim, thank you for the kind reply.

Marsha, we've read each other for quite some time. Thanks for the comments.

"If this grand panaorama before me is what you call God... then God is not dead."

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2006-03-04 09:23 AM


the kind of love will change...time will take care of that, Mike


M



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