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Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

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Netherlands

0 posted 2006-03-01 07:57 PM

Will you be there when my world crumbles down
And when my soul is not what it should be
When past and present take their liberty
To spin my mind just like the mill in town
Will you please hold me when I seem to drown
In thoughts quite weird but truly real to me
My world is one which no one else can see
My fear will be your unbelief and frown

By then I hope, you will embrace me tight
And tell me that the world is not that bad
That you will stay and see me through the night
While getting rid of demons in moon's light
And I will tell the tales that roam my head
Not knowing that it's you, but I just might

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (03-06-2006 10:26 PM).]

Martie

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California

1 posted 2006-03-01 08:58 PM

Titia...this is a lovely sonnet...I really enjoyed reading it.

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

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The Southwest

2 posted 2006-03-01 11:05 PM

It's beautiful.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 2006-03-02 10:29 PM

Dutchie, you did an excellent job here! It's a beautiful sonnet and I love the subject matter and how you handles it. Bravo!

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2006-03-02 10:39 PM

Titia....

Old World, new words...

fit you quite well. This, m'dear,
is a

Thank you for your ever present gifts.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2006-03-06 09:45 AM

Titia~
By golly ... this is just WONDERFUL~
You have sooooooo many talents, my friend,
always growing ... and sharing~

I LOVE YOU~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Misty Lilacs
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since 2005-11-15

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White Birch Forest

6 posted 2006-03-06 01:29 PM

Titia, this is beyond special. A keeper for all time. How I wish I could write like this.

Hugs to you and Muys, Marti

Every blade of grass has its angel
that bends over it and whispers,
"grow, grow."

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

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The Southwest

7 posted 2006-03-06 04:17 PM

Beautiful work!

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

8 posted 2006-03-07 06:48 AM

Thanks Deer

for helping me change that last sentence. My own pronounciation is often playing tricks with me when it comes to rhyming LOL

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

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