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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Full Breath “The human ego is a fragile thing, but I wouldn't say it unless I saw the potential in you to achieve it...” RCR…  It was then I took the fullest breath, to stay some tear from welling, as heartstrings were plucked quite tight, and this love, it’s swelling… how many times was this little boy the bane of my existence, how many times did I taunt his life, and oh, we were persistent for we were to be each other’s rock on which we would someday stand, though time and tide has ticked the clock I knew his secret was to have a band, though no one else might know this share, he knew mine…to write on air… Oh, I might pound him on the arm, then he would parry forth in glee, we would wrestle, but no harm would come to my brother, or me… but let no one else come in to this secret ring of taunt the memories are falling forth so fast… it’s strange how they still sing in haunt… and then I took the fullest breath for who knows when we shall see the face of each other again, hey, Robert…hey, Karilea… somehow, someway, his music lives on, even if it only reigns in this heart of me. ~*~ This write began on 3-9-03 Yet, I don’t feel it is finished, even now. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh, Karilea....how lovely. Robert is smilin', I know it! Hugging you in my heart. Chrislane Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I hope that it will never be finished...because such a poem as this should grow and mellow through all the years that you remember him. It's as beautiful as the man, beautiful as the heart of the woman who wrote it, and will always write it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie "somehow, someway, his music lives on, even if it only reigns in this heart of me." You have written its beat, and it is a heart-beat. Through you it lives in us by reading of your words.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Perfect, you listen well dear one...very well....Now, where are the tissues? |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
It was then, upon the moment of your birth, as your lungs gasped for their first breath...and I held mine....wondering who you were. Not knowing then, and sometimes now how much you would become a part of me for so many glorious though sometimes perilous years. And now, even after have savored the taste of your ways, of your tenacity and strength...I still hold my breath at times, wishing that I might once again hold you close to my chest, tickle those toes that grew to a man’s size...look into those captivating eyes which changed colors over years of seeing all that became precious to you, precious to me, precious to us all, all of us who absorbed your wisdom, felt the love of your heart...and still do... written for you both...hoping I came close to what you might have thought...hugging you... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I found myself holding my breath as I read.. and now I do hope it is never finished. Holding you close dear Karilea. Wonderful response from Barry as well. Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Hugs Karilea! I hope you are doing well. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The bond between brother and sister is so very special. After all, they were there all along. This tugs so hard at the heart strings. And like you said, your poem may never be finished.....as it should be. My heart and many prayers go out to you, Karilea. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karilea, this is absolutely precious. So tender it brings tears to my eyes, too. I bet it is not finished...just like you are feeling. Somehow, I feel Robert will find a way to continue to communicate with you. ...jo |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
Oh Karilea, I love the open end... it makes me think....  Neeraja |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
It's lovely Karilea and it makes for heart lurches and tears. Thank you for sharing. |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
That is the most sensitive write I have seen in regard to the dreams and relationships between brother and sister. I hope that you keep writing. Much enjoyed and such a hansomeman Hugs Kim |
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beaniebaby Member
since 2005-11-17
Posts 55 |
oh this is beautiful...and yep, you know I am wiping tears....*shakes her head and sighs* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I have to tell you it never ends, and I am into my second book of ongoing memories. Keep it going, and one day, when you least expect it, someone will read it all and know what love is. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If ever there was a song of the heart... this is it. *S* I don't have words... I just feel this... and send hugs. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
catching my breath, tissuing a tear truly, this should be ~a never-ending tale~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
dearheart, it will probably never be finished... this was candid, yet all engrossing...couldn't help but want for more... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I agree with Lee J. Beautiful, never ending. JL  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sometimes it never feels finished... A brother is the one thing I wanted and never received. It was what I needed most. He may be gone from physical being...but you had him for awhile... This was beautiful Karilea. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Karilea, Such an unbreakable bond! Thank you for sharing your memories and love with us. I'm glad you chose to write! You both have blessed us. sadie |
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lgina Member
since 2004-07-20
Posts 52 |
WOW!!!!!! What a heart beat. This one will keep on beating as long as you can hear the music. I loved it! |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Bond of siblinghood Annealed by living love Kept always in heart A beautiful story. Hugs Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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