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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2006-02-22 10:06 PM

What is there left, of life to borrow
but pain and suffering, again tomorrow
when hearts feign sorrow
but know not how to bleed?

I heard the bells toll,
but chose not to heed;
indeed, cry me no more tears
unless they fall, sincerely freed.

A soul full of mournfully tuned fears
must hold a heartbeat's cadence
or 'twill fall upon deaf ears
as disguised lies, bare in appearance.

So spare me your grave tomorrow,
for I have little need
for hearts that feign sorrow
but never choose to bleed.

*

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (02-23-2006 01:45 PM).]

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2006-02-22 10:49 PM

awesome Kacy !
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2006-02-22 10:59 PM

aw, thanks Chris!

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2006-02-22 11:16 PM

"Spare me your grave tomorrow,
for I have little need
for hearts that feign sorrow
but never choose to bleed."

Know what you mean, Kacy. Bravo!

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2006-02-23 12:02 PM

Oh yes Kacy. Well done.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2006-02-23 12:21 PM

thanks ladies!
I don't spend much time on rhyme, and this post proves it LOL
So I came back in, read it again, and edited, hoping the 'final' cut is superior.

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

6 posted 2006-02-23 01:31 AM

I like the rhyme in this very much, and it is well done.

this is a very strong poem and does pack a wallop. I like the motivation in this one.

~ Karen ~

Grinch
Member Elite

since 2005-12-31

Posts 2929
Whoville

7 posted 2006-02-23 01:18 PM

Why tongue in cheek?

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2006-02-23 01:39 PM

I don't really know. Blame it on my muse. I edited it out of the title.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (02-23-2006 09:25 PM).]

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2006-02-24 12:03 PM

I always admire your courage and honesty in saying what you believe and standing up for what you know is right. Enjoyed the poem.

Please ask your daughter to hug the new foal for me when the mother will let her.

- Owl

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