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Lost In Space
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Lost In Space |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Lost In Space My love is gone there's nothing left but a gaping wound where the shards of my heart fell out I let them swim in the sky with the stars and the moon how morbidly pretty So this is it the suburban male legend we call "The Big Alone" where picking up the pieces is such a bore and I'm too distracted, missin' my kitten, dog without a bone you know the tune I'm lost in space a pain in the ribs and a funny look on my face Melancholia in C Minor to make up for her missing grace oh I'm hurting for her love so venemous I've got it all in spades, baby ain't no talk about maybe 'cause I'm writing my blood all out tonight and I've got no friends to invite to this lovely lil' exorcism or is it an acidic baptism? I can never tell amidst all this smoking hell So take me out show me a good time, I plead to me look in a pretty girl's eyes, see if emotions can live there in the Sea of Hostility hey, what a vivid picture I paint there goes another saint fluttering out of the dead shell-like heart tearing it all apart at the hands of the female it fell just feel the weight of the stories I tell... ain't it fun? So lost in space I disappear in the riptide, lost without a trace I'm your ordinary Cancer boy, the moon pulling the lace ripping it all apart in my heart, just a taste of the glorious hurt to come the slow act of coming undone 'cause she's wringing all my blood out tonight scarlet just like her hair in the light that shines so menacingly I recall I gave my love freely but it was dead on arrival seriously injuring my heart's survival This love is gone there's nothing left but a black erosion a cemetery of kisses on my skin I search for a cure in this emotional commotion she inspired within me just as she conspired against me surrendering any lingering feeling for me a white flag waving for all to see at the mercy of a female so very cruel I got the lead in the play, I'm the perfect fool... a good time's had by all I guess But I'm lost in space oh me, the pathetic little turtle losing the race everybody's favorite happily miserable nutcase oh my, the glory of "The Big Alone" to come watch me baby as I come undone it's so, so elegant don't you agree? "I'm the soul drifter, and I'm out of this town, ain't no use hangin' round, you see" -- Lindsey Buckingham, 'Soul Drifter' |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
quote: Oh i loved this. So evocative and bitter. This one is going into my library for sure. excellent. xxx farewell the ash-tray girl |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Once again, I am so impressed and thoroughly entertained. It is such a delight to read you, soul drifter. Love your work~ *encore, encore* |
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smithdr Junior Member
since 2006-02-25
Posts 26 |
I like some of lines in the piece...especially: "Melancholia in C Minor to make up for her missing grace" The length is perhaps a bit overwhelming. Good work. David |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Wow that was somthing else. I give you a standing ovation for making me feel and see your pain. This should be a song. Thanks for the entertainment. I've felt the same way at times. hugs Kim |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
"a cemetery of kisses on my skin" WOW!!! Neeraja |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"hey, what a vivid picture I paint" Oh my! What a vivid picture you have painted. Heart wrenching. I enjoyed it very much! |
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