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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2006-02-18 06:23 AM



My thoughts of you go dancing after midnight,
dancing in the shadows on the moon,
and I don’t mourn the time we’re not together,
separation’s just a passing thought.

I could have spent my whole life
picking over images of how things ought to be;
it always sounds like one of those silly circles,
but freedom truly is a living state of being,
being in the moment being free.

You and I are separated by our choices,
bodies bound by chains of time and word
promises we both know could be broken,
but then we’d not have grown the spirits we deserve.

Though we’re apart I always feel you with me
safely sheltered from the winds of fate and chance,
and though I am surrounded by the needy,
my thoughts become a shadow’s dance of love

as the song of life turns poetry to lyrics
set to silent music playing on the backdrop of forever,
time is nothing but the story’s meter
and simple rhymes become the threads that bind our love.

©2006 by icebox

[This message has been edited by icebox (02-18-2006 09:41 AM).]

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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2006-02-18 08:26 AM


time is nothing but the story’s meter
and simple rhymes become the threads that bind our love.


very beautiful writing~~~

M

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2006-02-18 08:35 AM


"but then we’d not have grown the spirits we deserve."

and that would have been tragic...for us all.

  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Air Goddess
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3 posted 2006-02-18 09:38 AM


Sigh....Time and age...really an illusion...
I especially love the opening line...
"my thoughts of you go dancing after midnight"...
Your poem rocks!

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4 posted 2006-02-18 11:24 AM


Sometimes the things you write are so very True (the capital-T kind of true that Hemingway used to speak of), that it absolutely hurts to read them. This is excellent....and all too True. I'm glad I stopped for this one.

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Martie
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5 posted 2006-02-18 12:26 PM


icebox

"as the song of life turns poetry to lyrics
set to silent music playing on the backdrop of forever,
time is nothing but the story’s meter
and simple rhymes become the threads that bind our love."

Beautiful!!  


garysgirl
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6 posted 2006-02-18 02:35 PM


as the song of life turns poetry to lyrics
set to silent music playing on the backdrop of forever,
time is nothing but the story’s meter
and simple rhymes become the threads that bind our love.


A very beautiful love poem, Iceman.
And, I LOVE romantic poetry!! Thandks for
sharing.
Hugs,
Ethel

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7 posted 2006-02-18 02:59 PM


a beautiful poem that creates music  that warms a heart
to a  soul
that  sings along
with each beat
and spirits dance
so full of life
serenity~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Dark Angel
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8 posted 2006-02-18 04:04 PM


oh Wow,

melt me!

sigh, this is going into my library

absolutely beautiful, magnificent writing.

m xx

how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more
~Neruda~

tracie66
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9 posted 2006-02-18 10:02 PM


wonderfully penned - most enjoyable read
~hugs~
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                        — W. E. Channing



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Gaia
10 posted 2006-02-18 10:04 PM


"separated by our choice"
a simple, but profound truth
we do choose, don't we?

The Lady
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11 posted 2006-02-19 12:03 PM




"My thoughts of you go dancing after midnight,
dancing in the shadows on the moon,"

Delightful write.

iliana
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12 posted 2006-02-19 01:10 AM


Mr. C., the ice melts in this one!  Beautifully rendered.   ....jo
XOx Uriah xOX
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13 posted 2006-02-19 01:11 AM


Wow!  Excellent!  Any words of praise I attempt will only fall short.  THIS is poetry. ::bows::
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
14 posted 2006-02-19 01:23 AM


You and I are separated by our choices,
bodies bound by chains of time and word
promises we both know could be broken,
but then we’d not have grown the spirits we deserve.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I am so there, and it's not such a bad place to be.

I am always so impressed by your poetry, but this
is especially meaningful to me, thank you, icebox~


serenity blaze
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15 posted 2006-02-19 01:45 AM


You are so lovely, you are dangerous. Why, you should come with a warning label.




Kathy
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16 posted 2006-02-19 02:52 AM


enjoyed your write...and..a very handsome fellow you are, I might add.

Hugs,
Kathy

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
17 posted 2006-02-19 12:25 PM


*Nodding and agreeing with Kathy here
It's your kind eyes as I said a long time ago.*

"as the song of life turns poetry to lyrics
set to silent music playing on the backdrop of forever,
time is nothing but the story’s meter
and simple rhymes become the threads that bind our love."

Do you have any idea how beautiful this is?
Into my library with your others.
Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~

OwlSA
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18 posted 2006-02-19 05:05 PM


Beautiful, tragic, superbly written.  I wish things had worked out better for the two of you together.

- Owl

Magnus
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19 posted 2006-02-19 05:34 PM


Awesome, beautiful words...you have done
well dear friend.  

Honeybee
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20 posted 2006-05-07 06:48 PM



Oh, I love this - very moving and powerful.
I'm saving this~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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