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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2006-02-17 01:44 PM

You place me there,
on the back burner
along with all of the other things

that you can "get to later"

or, even
are less important to you
than this hurryupandwait
schedule that you abuse

and, yeah I know that someday
when you're bored, you'll finally look
until you can find all of those things
that you took

and carelessly tossed aside;

forgotten items placed there
to reside until one day
when you realize

that you forgot to turn
the burner down
and before we
had a chance to simmer

       you burned our love
           to the ground

and left nothing more
than this scorched love

remembered only in
       charred remains
                of yesterday.

I like the price you pay to keep passion on solid ground....
if it ain't about thunder and lightning it just ain't worthwhile
oh no, it just ain't my style....{Toby Keith}

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (02-17-2006 02:44 PM).]

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2006-02-17 01:54 PM

"and, yeah I know that someday
when you're bored, you'll finally look
until you can find all of those things
that you took

and carelessly tossed aside;"

Sad, sad, sad...
However, very well written.

JL

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2006-02-17 02:08 PM

Aching and angry on your behalf. This is very sad, but so well-penned (as always!).

- Owl

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2006-02-17 08:11 PM

hurryupandwait
schedule that you abuse

made me ~smile~ for personal reasons

nicely done

M

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2006-02-17 09:15 PM

Ouch!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2006-02-17 11:39 PM

Nice writing...James

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2006-02-18 10:19 PM

"that you forgot to turn
the burner down
and before we
had a chance to simmer

you burned our love
to the ground"

Nicely done Gentle Spirit!

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

7 posted 2006-02-21 02:17 AM

WOW!
great write - enjoyed!
~hugs~

Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2006-02-21 06:22 AM

this deserved another read...

M

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

9 posted 2006-02-21 02:33 PM

This is wonderful, Gentle Spirit. However, I put things on the back burner because I need to clear the way to give them my full attention!
Just a thought. I do not disagree with your theme. I would just want to avoid getting burned. Thought provoking poem as you can well see. Loved it!

Shenachie

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

10 posted 2006-02-21 02:49 PM

awesome read and write...

Nightshade