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wrapped in a world caught in a drop of rain |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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you told me once that you lived in a port city too that your eyes held a sky-full and that it was no coincidence crossing off the numbers of July i remember how my limbs felt bare how you gave me wings and a little serenity that day wrapped in a world caught….. in a drop of rain and you told me only i could make you yearn for beaches when blue fish swim in tears as i try mightily, to hold back the tide how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more ~Neruda~ |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Beautiful! Loved this Dark Angel! The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I just love you so much maree...  what a gentle bit of grace this is and I am rendered speechless by your talent, your beauty and, well...just you. thank you my ladylove.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
OMG Maree, this is sooo beautiful, you've outdone yourself this time Bella damn, you do collapse me with your scribes! seek the flame within yourself |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree....Just beautiful what is in there, in that drop and in your soul.  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Yup, gotta say that is some wonderful writing. I like it a lot dear girl.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
PERFECTION!  I'm saving it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aha... what serenity said! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gosh and you write of the bond you share beautifully, Maree. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Beautiful poetry and imagery. I'm glad I got a chance to read it, thank you. Cheers - Ed "Give me a museum, and I'll fill it." |
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Kathy Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 153 |
Loved this Poem... and...what a wonderful line here: "wrapped in a world caught….. in a drop of rain" Hugs, Kathy |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
simply magical you are gift the tides release to us, then come to reclaim you |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Ahhh sweetie this is so very touching - you are so very talented  ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"and you told me only i could make you yearn for beaches when blue fish swim in tears as i try mightily, to hold back the tide" Enjoyed so much! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"when blue fish swim in tears as i try mightily, to hold back the tide" Awesome write, Maree. These above lines just jump out -- so effective! ....jo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
that your eyes held a sky-full and that it was no coincidence ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I so enjoy the seascapes you paint with your words! Your poetry is rich, and like none other, Maree~ |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
i remember how my limbs felt bare how you gave me wings and a little serenity that day wrapped in a world caught….. in a drop of rain Oh my, Maree!! This is absolutely beautifful!! Just awesome writing, Sweetie. Thank you for sharing your heart with us. Hugs, Ethel |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
what else can one say but...grace us with more~~  M |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Some tides cannot be held; this you know so well, as do I. Here....well, I'll just say we're two weeks from the Grunion Run. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Maree- No one writes like you my dear friend...long time I know. It's amazing to me how you write with such an outpouring of emotions-so much comes from your heart... "and you told me only i could make you yearn for beaches when blue fish swim in tears as i try mightily, to hold back the tide" this is pure magic right here. I could read you forever. Take care. Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
This was beautiful, with a lovely rhythmic pattern that took me right along. And deep, heart-felt analogous information here, with regards to the word serenity...it did bring tears to my eyes like a seafoam mist blown along a rock-lined shore. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
"and you told me only i could make you yearn for beaches when blue fish swim in tears as i try mightily, to hold back the tide" Maree, ***BIG SIGH*** This was so beautiful and captivating...probably one of the best pieces I'v read by you. Something about it so powerful yet a quiet kind of power..stirred emotion deep inside of me. Breathtaking my friend, just breathtaking! Take care. Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"how you gave me wings and a little serenity that day wrapped in a world caught….. in a drop of rain" What a magnificent read. I love this verse the most! The whole poem is exceptional, but this verse paints the picture for the reader. I think so, anyway. Great write. JL |
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Kathy Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 153 |
The Title..Oh..The Title says all! great write!!!! Hugs, Kathy |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is so beautiful and wistful, Maree... Well done!!  ~sky I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying.... |
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bubblesleave Member
since 2006-03-04
Posts 197Bloomington, IN |
A seer indeed! Before I die, I will write like you, I hope! Hugs, Bubbles |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Simply lovely. like its author |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
this is an unbelievably good poem, one to treasure. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
We all need our Serenity... A beautiful tribute.. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Maree~ I just have to read you, I know I will never be disappointed - you are awesome sweetie  ~hugs~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Even the title itself is worth remembering! "wrapped in a world caught in a drop of rain" You write with such love-liness.  EA |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
thanks everyone, for all your wonderful comments and compliments, but really all thanks and compliments should go to our Serenity Blaze, my Lady love  .....for she inspired this through our conversations and thoughts shared. thank you M'lady m xx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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emeralddreamer Junior Member
since 2006-03-24
Posts 27PA, United States |
So very beautiful... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I had to read you again, breath you in again...and savor every moment hon... I miss your words, terribly. Make me smile? Write something... soon....Hugs Luv you.... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
always beautiful... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a beautiful, beautiful piece |
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