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i ache for you
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i ache for you |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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For you, at the hospital, clinging to one you love: I’ve never met you, but I ache for you. because i saw you cry. because your tears were thick, and deep. because time is dry, cold, metallic, doesn’t shed a tear, doesn’t care. you, because you haven’t even thought that far; don’t realize you’re about to fall on your knees, doubt all you knew, curse life. mourn. grieve. because you’ve denied it, and even now flatline ringing, time announced, and his eyes staring back like fish at a deli, dead, you still don’t believe. because you shouldn’t have to. Hupomeno. |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Oh Alyssa, this is so beautiful... I ache for them too. The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
.......... ::speechless:: ::sighs:: powerful A favorite |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
GG, darlin' I feel your ache. You have such a caring heart. It is so hard to understand why we have to bear some things. Maybe it is just a reminder for us to keep our eyes on the Eagle, if you know what I mean. Your writing is just amazing, sweet one.  ....jo |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
GG, I understand this. I was there writing journals for my loved one and felt the strong pull to get up and give a hug to one who seemd distraught. Becaue as you said, while I knew what was happening to me and mine, she was just beginning...love to you with the very big heart. martyjo |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Alyssa~ I kind of felt a kinship to this one~ The sorrow of others permeating our thoughts~ It is good to see you sweet poetess~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jesus, Alyssa you always leave me gaping, unable to breathe, the insides of my chest on fire when I read you. Thats a good thing.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
dang this is a heart grabber, GG you poured this one out with such emotion |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ever the tender caring heart. I like that about you and your writing. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
your heart shines in everything you write gal, and everything you write leaves me waiting for your next post. Loved this sweetie. |
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Kathy Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 153 |
Oh,,,this is sooo good! The compassion...yet...the truth! Hugs, Kathy |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
It grips my heart rather tightly..such an image... nice write..  hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
So caring Alyssa. Beautiful. |
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Air Goddess Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 108Canada |
Your poem left me aching too... Well done! |
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tatalinia Member
since 2005-12-17
Posts 137CA, US |
excellant poem , i could feel the pain I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
GG I have been in both places, and you have captured the heart of both the empathetic watcher and the soon to grieve. Thank you for that caring heart of yours! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
GG this put shivers up my spine... because you shouldn't have to, sums it all up...and yet, we know, somehow destiny has it's way with us...and it's not always nice to stand by and watch...I send you strength and courage...dear poet friend God bless you and yours... |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Good. . . At some point you do learn to live with the darkness. John |
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