navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #37 » of rivers sorting rain
Open Poetry #37
Post A Reply Post New Topic of rivers sorting rain Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2006-02-14 07:38 AM



we are slow waters behind the stones
in our own grotto of quiescence
and I know your currents as mine
and how they weave into memory socks

like fingers in a cake mix
momentary impressions
but the sweetness makes one taste
and erese the lines

that should have been tattoos
placed from the inside out
not just on the skin
lovely erosion of beforehand

penitration is a lovely word
when considering applications
as I try to itemize from the herd
of the droplets of my million pores

which are those just me and which are all us


_________________
daark

© Copyright 2006 ©Dark 2k - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2006-02-14 07:55 AM


your words remind me so much of a poet I followed years ago, when I first started writing...he was extraordinarily gifted as you are...

Here's wishing you a lovely Valentine's Day with that pill counting gal...smiles and hugs

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
2 posted 2006-02-14 08:02 AM



Now I will envision
the water's penetration
into creek rocks...

and hear the swirl
of bubbling sounds...

a lovely gift you leave us with,
this full mooned Valentine's morn...


Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
3 posted 2006-02-14 08:18 AM


lady Lee J and Lady Sunshine, happy V day to you both and thanks for the eyes here

Mysteria
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada
4 posted 2006-02-14 11:59 AM


Oh...loved this one!  I loved these lines Dark...

Like fingers in a cake mix
momentary impressions
but the sweetness makes one taste
and erese the lines

Hey!  Happy Valentine's Day to you and your bike too

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
5 posted 2006-02-14 12:17 PM


ms mysteria..
she and I both say
thanks lady for the V-day thought
I think her chrome likes you

Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
6 posted 2006-02-14 12:38 PM


"which are those just me and which are all us"

Love that ending!!  


Air Goddess
Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 108
Canada
7 posted 2006-02-14 01:30 PM


Dark and deep as rivers and
mysterious as rain ...

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
8 posted 2006-02-14 02:14 PM


ms martie, thank you little neighbor for the eyes.

_____________

ms airG, you bless me lady friend, thank you

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #37 » of rivers sorting rain

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary