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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2006-02-14 07:25 AM



I was gone but you were still there
like the windows in a jeep
looking at the mountains
and holding up mirrors
so the forests can see too
what is behind them

and yes I glanced at your eyes
or where they should be behind
the ray ban and sun tan lucky colors
to see if there was expression
or just pre-tension wondering
if I would remember the sign

about ten items or less
and I had a dozen eggs
you counted them in your mind
and I read your mouth
before it was put into gear
but I knew your four wheel drive

from another time you were in line
but out of line with your math
and my six packs were only four packs
and you blushed when scolded
by the goddess of number three
and offered me your handshake

but I thought my back was better
___________
daark

scribblenote: yep...one of those goofiesuit merrygoroundrides...and no I didn't have eggs, but was amazed at the lady that is always counting..when I get my prozac refilled I think I shall ask her out.

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2006-02-14 07:58 AM


there are lessons to learn, are there not...oh the mistakes we make, and the merry-go-rounds we choose????  Been there to my friend...all ya gotta say is....sheeesh...

Happy day to you and thank you for a walk down memory lane, I think? hehehe

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2006-02-14 01:46 PM




You always catch me in amaze~

Happy Valentine's Day~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2006-02-14 02:11 PM


thanks you two...you both smile me
happy V day to both of you

Midnitesun
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4 posted 2006-02-14 07:11 PM


enjoyed the 'pre-tension'

over easy

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2006-02-14 07:28 PM


thank ya..thank ya very much (wink)
Kaoru
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6 posted 2006-02-14 08:45 PM


"when I get my prozac refilled I think I shall ask her out."


What a wonderful start to a fulfilling relationship! Haha. I'm just joshin' ya!

I loved the poem.. by the by...isn't it usually overlooked when you only have 2 items over 10? I would, but that's just me.

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2006-02-14 09:04 PM


ms KA..heck I don't know the rules..or maybe I choose to ignore lots of em....thanks for the eyes lady
Sunshine
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8 posted 2006-02-14 09:39 PM



Thanks, Elv...is...for the ride....




Klassy Lassy
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9 posted 2006-02-14 09:48 PM


Why do I get the feeling that you thought your back was better, but your heart was butter...and maybe a little melted at that???  

Yes, you do amaze me, too!  

~ Klassy ~

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2006-02-15 07:44 AM


sunshine..wink again..

______________

ms klassy..butter...moi? thanks for the eyes lady

The Lady
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11 posted 2006-02-16 12:44 PM




You perplex and amaze me every time Stranger.

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2006-02-16 06:58 AM


mmmmm a perplex, now those are my favorite kinds of candy..thank you lady friend
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13 posted 2006-02-18 06:49 PM


need prozac for a date
well if a lady cant cheer you up
and distract you.  nothing like a pill
so dull a souls spirit

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Dark Stranger
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14 posted 2006-02-18 08:35 PM


ms groves...would never take something to take something else..that would be given in time, thanks for the eyes lady
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