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FNG
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since 2006-02-07
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0 posted 2006-02-12 02:05 AM


Can the gentle breeze bring,
a man I long to cling?

Just a lifetime with you,
is that too much to ask of you?

Who can tell of my sorrow...
Perhaps a dying sparrow...

The sun casts a shadow,
Upon someone I hardly know.

Bring Him back to me...
My woeful cries into the sea...

There came no reply,
Only the gentle breeze...

© Copyright 2006 Danielle Tan - All Rights Reserved
Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time
1 posted 2006-02-12 01:49 PM


There is immense talent here

I almost think of a bird of a first flight

Meaning, emotion controlled delivered


Yes

Dave

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
2 posted 2006-02-12 11:46 PM




"The sun casts a shadow,
Upon someone I hardly know."

Good work. More please.



FNG
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since 2006-02-07
Posts 477

3 posted 2006-02-13 05:14 AM


Gee...thanks for the encouragement!

Bodger and Lady  

FNG


[This message has been edited by FNG (02-13-2006 05:45 AM).]

HopeS
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since 2000-12-22
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Perth Western Australia
4 posted 2006-04-18 07:17 AM


I can relate , I have sat by the sea , whispering the same longing plea

Hope

FNG
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since 2006-02-07
Posts 477

5 posted 2006-04-18 07:20 AM


Hope,

I wish you are not longing anymore.

FNG

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