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Mary Jane Graffiti
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Mary Jane Graffiti There's some wild screaming down the hall and Mary Jane graffiti on the wall the kids didn't mean any harm big red broken hearts tattooed on their arms yes, hearts were once beating at 33 & 1/3 'round the night yes, smiles were lost and found in the lack of light Under the darkest bridges you were there tangled up like the ribbons in your hair sayin' the boys don't mean anything sweet blue smoke they were chain-smoking yeah, the rhythm and blues those Chicago nights sounded like no, I can't find the lost cost of living 'neath the turnpike Babydoll with the lowdown crawl stop bleeding yourself dry sugarsweet teen with a touch of velveteen but ragged like the love of a guy who doesn't care for her and always lies as long as she believes him that world will never die it's a gritty little sin So there they go, my dream lovers # 1-24 gettin' the feeling I felt this way before but something new in her careless heart a little beauty inside her, a reckless work of art still, please remind my mind to proceed with care still, I can't wait to break through her emerald stare Alleycat with the know-how, where's it at the love you misplaced? See I'm the tomcat kid that wants the winning bid on your rare smiles tonight shining like soft moonlight as long as you can believe me this world will never die it's a promise so pretty Now here's some wild time after all painting Mary Jane graffiti on the wall the girls don't seem to mind big green eyes take 'em down every time maybe through green eyes she tries not to cry again maybe I'm too afraid to stand up to her big boyfriends Babydoll there's graffitti on the wall to let your know the kids are all right sugarsweet teen, there's another scene where love could make sense tonight so don't care for the other guys in sight as long as we're together here that scene will bathe us in light it's a smile and a cheer 'Cause tonight, tonight baby there's wild screaming down the hallways and Mary Jane graffiti on the walls of grey a little color the kids wanna see big red mending hearts flying high and free yes, hearts swirling like 45 records on the inside yes, smiles curling big and wide love and trembling 'neath the turnpike and don't be surprised, Melissa, if everything turns out all right it's our gritty little secret and a promise so perfect y'know? "I'm the soul drifter, and I'm out of this town, ain't no use hangin' round, you see" -- Lindsey Buckingham, 'Soul Drifter' |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
I don't know why this is on a back page with no replies.... I like it  It's rather abstract...rather entertaining...enjoyed.. hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh this was something else, a little rough around the edges, just enough to keep me going. Kind of like shifting into overdrive, and burning rubber!!! Even though the subject matter was down to the nitty gritty, and off the beaten track. THAT was the thrill of it all, and entertainment at it's best... "y'know"  Excellent work, soul drifter!!! I applaud you as a writer and admire your colorful imagination. These couple verses stood out for me, especially the promise so pretty. Gotta love it!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ So there they go, my dream lovers # 1-24 gettin' the feeling I felt this way before but something new in her careless heart a little beauty inside her, a reckless work of art still, please remind my mind to proceed with care still, I can't wait to break through her emerald stare Alleycat with the know-how, where's it at the love you misplaced? See I'm the tomcat kid that wants the winning bid on your rare smiles tonight shining like soft moonlight as long as you can believe me this world will never die it's a promise so pretty |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The title hooked me right away here, and I love the rhythms and this reads like a tough sassy walk down a dangerous street. Loved it. |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Thank you, thank you to all who pulled this one back up out of the dregs. It's one of my favorite ones that I've done. I appreciate the kind comments. "I'm the soul drifter, and I'm out of this town, ain't no use hangin' round, you see" -- Lindsey Buckingham, 'Soul Drifter' |
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