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marcel
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0 posted 2006-02-08 10:33 PM



I Can’t Warm to the Chill


I can’t warm to the chill of time
That un-passionate space of eternity meant for healing,
But seemingly is temperate only to beauty---
As the un-watered rose can attest
Returning to what it knows until the next bloom;
So to does the desolate lover, who returns to heartbreak…

I can’t warm to the chill of her parting words,
That sweet condescending voice of my admiration,
Singing in chords and daggers that explode into my glass soul---
Sharp and accurate splinters that embed into my consciousness,
Causing warm memories to bleed into a cold past---
Canals that merge into my veins,
Pumping pain into the skies before the rain.

“Don’t want to shed dry tears”
“These snowflakes from my heart”
Wish I could get that tune out of my head,
It rings back and forth like a chime reminding the hour;
My hands cannot warm to the chill of these words,
Fingers brittle to the echoes of  those last intimate moments,
Pen falling to a hidden place of imaginary love ever-after,
A figment I now believe myself to be
Of a heartbreaker’s dream.

Marcel


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JL
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1 posted 2006-02-08 10:37 PM


Excellent write Marcel.

JL

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2 posted 2006-02-09 12:25 PM




Enjoyed Marcel.


FNG
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3 posted 2006-02-09 06:17 AM


like the title! that's what lures me to read it. Nice work.
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4 posted 2006-02-09 02:35 PM


so many lines I could highlght...
but shall simply say, I felt this
and hope for a warm time-warp

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2006-02-11 02:17 PM


Your words hollow out the walls that can build an empire of pent up pain.  So very moving, as you convey a reality that no human being chooses, but we all must confront in renewal of the spirit.

Well done.
TD

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6 posted 2006-02-11 05:43 PM


Excellent writing Marcel

Andrew

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