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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2006-02-08 08:10 AM



you were the follower of whispers
as your feet worshiped the stones
and your eyes were the amber morning
waiting to bait the fathers without sons

the walls were heavy with prayers
voices were echoes that clung as webs
and the beige that wears dark veils
is still white inside to the mortar men

that hurry their hands in worshiping
spreading the butter of their sins
to pay for some halfway house holiday
on their way to a hades for the chosen

was it the wine of a kiss that stirred you
or the whine of a kiss that spurred me
to this threadless entwining rapture
where our hands are the only tools

to feed the bellies of our grotesque

_______________
daark

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2006-02-08 09:26 AM


painfully felt and yet, knowing the vacation that you speak of, away from the rest of the world, amidst a warm hug, that says, for the moment I care...

outstanding write this morning D.

Thank you for the hug

Sunshine
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2 posted 2006-02-08 10:20 AM



I see a huge, Georgian style cathedral in this.
The only sound, some chants, and shuffling feet.
I like the way it surrounds me.

Thank you for this.


.

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2006-02-08 10:24 AM


"this threadless entwining rapture
where our hands are the only tools"

~ You certainly do have a titilating way of expressing yourself!


EA

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2006-02-08 10:35 AM


lady pipsters...thank you for your eyes..it is truely an old building...17th century...and it does have secrets moaning the hallways..thanks to you
whiskey
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5 posted 2006-02-08 06:41 PM


you my dark one are a wonderful penspeaker, and thankyou I very much enjoyed it

Julie

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2006-02-08 07:15 PM


ms jewelee..a pleasure to penspeak if it pleases your eyes, thanks lady
Martie
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7 posted 2006-02-08 08:10 PM


Hi DS

"was it the wine of a kiss that stirred you
or the whine of a kiss that spurred me
to this threadless entwining rapture
where our hands are the only tools"

wine will do that to you....er....me!

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8 posted 2006-02-08 08:19 PM


Sounds like one heck of a lover.  Great poem, It one of those nowalater ones were you got you read it again and again.
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9 posted 2006-02-08 09:03 PM


wine kisses,  sounds delilcious

darkness
master to light~

  no wine here
  i prefer light  
  
     thanks for the dance of shadows
  in the night, while someone forgot to close a window  


My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Mysteria
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10 posted 2006-02-08 09:28 PM


An incredibly vivid poem - I absolutely loved this one Dark.  What buiding is this?  Would love to link your words with the "real" image and compare impressionism.
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11 posted 2006-02-09 03:04 AM


Do you know how amazing this is? I imagine so much when I read this, and I will keep those visions...

=)

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