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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2006-02-04 06:40 PM


As a wind gently slowing twisting

you drew across my hand softly ruffling hairs on the back of my hand as you passed in a breath of wind

touching a breath as you never turned

leaving vapours entire in a fragment of philosphy woven
sense in you

everything else

rough

or is that a word for just a word that in a moment was so soft that you were there and there

and rough was soft

was I taking my

to you

As a wind gently slowing twisting you drew across my hand softly ruffling hairs on the back of my hand as you passed in a breath of wind touching a breath as you never turned leaving vapours entire in a fragment of philosphy woven

Silence despite desire hung changing every scent every smoked filled vapour

We touch physically as the door slammed
We touched in that earth that traps us
Desiring
Feeling

We sound like a sunday radio show

In

Something so intense

That it is burnt

Into the next train timetable

Had I known your name
Had you let me

Had I not understood

A yes that became a no

Because I never understood either

And will never know either

as

The Man is Still Alive

Maybe I was sleeping

But

no I never slept

Did I dream behind fences erected

Yes

But the man is alive

Did I lose sight of my feet trenchant in my head of being

But the man is alive

Did I fail to understand

Yes

But the man is alive

Did I fail to understand self

To understand “two feet on the ground”

Yes I failed

But like a man on a Green I face the same thing

People I can trust and

Those I have to mix with

All for their own worlds

Yes

I am a Woman

Or a Man

Or in the mind

A Person

But

As a wind gently slowing twisting

you drew across my hand softly ruffling hairs on the back of my hand as you passed in a breath of wind

touching a breath as you never turned

leaving vapours entire in a fragment of philosphy woven
sense in you

everything else

rough

or is that a word for just a word that in a moment was so soft that you were there and there

and rough was soft

was I taking my

to you



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california
1 posted 2006-02-06 12:42 PM


this is really touching.

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

froggy
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since 2003-06-23
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Michigan
2 posted 2006-02-12 01:55 PM


Truly a beautiful piece. Speaks so many things to me.

:-)

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time
3 posted 2006-02-12 02:02 PM


I keep having this idea that this is danced by a troup in clogs and there are no words on this just the image from sound

It is long winded explanatory and makes me want to publish an old one, but I am on the road in a couple of hours so I will publish and be "whatever'd"


Dave

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2006-02-12 02:08 PM


A beautiful piece Dave...
Much enjoyed this one.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2006-02-12 03:34 PM



"Whatever" stepped in
and left it clogging dance
here for us...

has become a
for me.

Dave, this is one of your better ones...
and I like the way
it talks to
me.

.

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