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Charisma
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0 posted 2006-02-04 10:34 AM

~Spring-Like~

Serene Morning hush
crispy frozen dew
moonlight fades
inside first sunbeams
spring-like daffodil

[This message has been edited by Charisma (02-05-2006 03:50 AM).]
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1 posted 2006-02-04 12:47 PM

Charisma~
To find the beauty of you gracing our pages again is to find a word-bouquet in all it's splendor~

I hope you know just how happy it makes me to have you back with us~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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2 posted 2006-02-04 02:18 PM

Charisma
I find you and your daffodil a delight.
Martie
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3 posted 2006-02-04 03:19 PM

Charisma....I saw this too, with you!  
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4 posted 2006-02-04 03:23 PM

I noticed your critique message asks to know of grammar or mispelled words.  I did notice one thing that caught me up when I read it.  Instead of "moonlit fades", I think the word that fits better is, moonlight fades.  
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5 posted 2006-02-05 12:50 PM



"inside first sunbeams
spring-like daffodil"

I've been waiting for the first daffodil Charisma. Thank you for sharing it.


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6 posted 2006-02-05 03:56 AM

Thank you all for reading and your nice comments.
Thank you Martie, for the grammar
, I've changed the word as it fits beter indeed.

(((hugs))))
Charisma
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7 posted 2006-02-05 11:13 AM

Charismatic One, you just put the 'spring' in my step and painted my day happy yellow!

Warm hug and a sunny smile,
EA
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How lovely this is.
Hugs~Nancy

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9 posted 2006-02-05 01:39 PM

I am sure ready for Spring and am excited that my daffodils have already begun to emerge
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