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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2006-02-03 11:03 AM




See the web of broken lines?
All around his head it winds,
leaving threads of many kinds
to smother him.

God walks upon his brain,
and every step’s another stain
that whispers if he goes insane
god talks to him.

©2006 by icebox

© Copyright 2006 icebox - All Rights Reserved
Dominique-Simone
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1 posted 2006-02-03 11:15 AM


Well done, so much said in such little words


Martie
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2 posted 2006-02-03 11:17 AM


icebox

"See the web of broken lines?
All around his head it winds,
leaving threads of many kinds
to smother him."

Yes, I see that belief will help him.  

iliana
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3 posted 2006-02-03 03:41 PM


I'm standing on the left, applauding.   ...jo
The Lady
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4 posted 2006-02-03 05:11 PM




I'm standing with jo and I am applauding too. Good work!

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2006-02-03 05:18 PM


icebox,
It surely makes you think.

Bodger
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6 posted 2006-02-03 05:26 PM


I will certainly say "it went over my head"

It seems to be someone who has an answer for everthing, who believes he is more intelligent and patronises

But it could also be someone personal who is demented - another poet writing prose

I like your writing - and some is tongue in cheek and towards the highter altitudes

Dave

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7 posted 2006-02-04 04:38 AM


very interesting one sir really makes ya think

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

poetry_queen
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8 posted 2006-02-04 05:32 PM


really like this alot leanne x
wvatvrider
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9 posted 2006-02-05 02:16 PM


God talks to all of us-sometimes we imagine it and sometimes we know it with every fiber of our being.
Huan Yi
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10 posted 2006-02-05 04:32 PM



A different perspective

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