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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2006-02-03 07:50 AM


being one's book has it's difficulty
the warm words from those humble pages
that one should feel safe in reciting
even when their mouth was full of water

or the smooth corners of that leather
that one would allow her fingers
to contemplate on cautious evenings
when the fireplace and windows

were her only lovers but in depth
discussions in her mind would shoe tie
the saliva of her soul boot's fear
with the time to watch those tomorrows

from the other side of a man's skin
when he was the sundial of sinning
and her love needed string less bows
just to lean on like handled shovels

while she supervised his counseling


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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2006-02-03 08:03 AM


"that one should feel safe in reciting
even when their mouth was full of water"

*nodding*

oh how you speak...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Sunshine
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2 posted 2006-02-03 08:04 AM



I know the leather
of this bind...

And I have always loved
old books...

thank you for this.

.

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2006-02-03 09:01 AM


thanx gurls for the morning touch..suzziec and sunfun, you two make my metal shimmer
Dominique-Simone
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4 posted 2006-02-03 11:37 AM


I love the way you use simple words to create a materpiece of a picture. Excellent!!!
LeeJ
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5 posted 2006-02-03 11:48 AM


you allow the reader to feel as if they've been nurished with complete honestly which comes from those who have a passion for life.


Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2006-02-03 02:26 PM


ms DS, thanks to you for the review

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lady lee j you always make me feel warm, thank you

Charisma
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7 posted 2006-02-03 03:43 PM


Splendid penned, enjoyed the read very much

Charisma

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2006-02-03 04:26 PM


thanks lady C..I appreciate you
The Lady
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9 posted 2006-02-03 05:10 PM




"discussions in her mind would shoe tie
the saliva of her soul boot's fear
with the time to watch those tomorrows"

Goose bumps Stranger. Powerful!


Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2006-02-03 05:46 PM


lady...thank you ...and the goosegoodies look great on you..
oakgrove
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11 posted 2006-02-03 10:26 PM


write me a book please the placement of your words could make me dream in such wondrous colors
Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2006-02-04 02:36 AM


friend oak..let the writing begin,,just one book? (pout) thanks for the review
Martie
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13 posted 2006-02-04 03:17 PM


DS

I used to own a pair of Red leather boots.  I had to give them to a friend because they hurt me, yet still...I want red shoes because of Sting and the dancing blues, ya know?  

Enjoyed the thoughts your poem left me...thank you!  

poetry_queen
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14 posted 2006-02-04 04:50 PM


wow
thought that this poem was really good, you ar really clever with the words that you use, they are so simple but they have so mych depth to them a piece of art
leanne x

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