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Alanna's dance
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Alanna's dance |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Jimmyray could build a fire. I’d seen him start one in a downpour once, outta damn near nothin’ and build it to roarin’ outta not much more. Yep, Jimmyray could build a fire and tonight, he had a doozy goin’. There were half a dozen or so folks movin’ and swayin’ around it, though I never did hear what they were dancin’ to, they seemed to be hearin’ it just fine. I leaned back onto the stack of burnables collecting a few feet away from the blankets that Jimmyray slept on. “Nick! Lookat ‘er, Nick! Lookat my far! Ain’t she a beaut? No moon t’night, thas why. She’s beautee full. All lit up from inside...” his voice faded as his eyes fixed on the flame he’d created. My eyes fixed on a woman I'd never seen before, swaying and graceful, rhythmic alongside a black night’s catlike melody, enticing, though her lips made no sound wrapping around words I couldn’t make out but later (too late) found to be “Whether it fate Or happenstance Lay the rail That brought you here Let me lead A merry dance Without cry Of coward’s prayer Heat blood red The tempered lance In flame borne From spark of thigh Let me lead A merry dance To your death And my delight”. Yep, it would be quite some time before Alanna’s words and ways were clear to me. And even later that I’d learn there are some voices you only have to hear once to know you never wanna hear them, again. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: And that is what this is... all lit up, from the inside. It's good to have you back! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I really enjoyed this scene, Duncan, and the Alanna that you painted.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
grinnin here, figgerin you 'n Alanna been dancin 'round some mighty hot fires |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Hmmmm.... This "Alanna" thing seems to be catchin' I've been enjoying the reads...all great! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan I really enjoyed this read. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This was an excellent poem with such an interesting story... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 This was very nice to wake up to.  love ya Duncan!(Does this mean it's my turn? Or do we do the next dance together?) "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love these Duncan... I'll be watching for the next installment. Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Damn, I'll be back to this, have to go to school Duncan. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
My hands and heart are still warmed by that fire.  Nice write Duncan. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"there are some voices you only have to hear once to know you never wanna hear them, again." Oh! I love this. I love the story, I love the voice. Wow! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I think a dance is in order . . . Damn, this was worth the wait. though I never did hear what they were dancin’ to, they seemed to be hearin’ it just fine. See? |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Really enjoyed this, Duncan.  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thanks all, for the time and great replies. Susan and I are planning a "dance" together....soon. |
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Bagger Vance Member
since 2006-02-01
Posts 108Aotearoa |
ahhhhh i came, i saw, i read......... and i liked i liked it a lot  White Gold Wielder |
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