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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2006-01-30 12:31 PM



TRYST
December 1998

GLANCE
It was a momentary pact
of who knows what
for who knows how long
but so exhilarating
and bewitching
that a new path was born.

CONVERSATION
The leaf swayed in the wind
and the light danced on it
and flew to another
in celebration of
Life.

MOMENT
The pan flute set free celestial trills
and held the last note forever
and the world stopped turning
to listen
to the attainment
of Perfection.

AFTERMATH
It was a moonstruck silence
which held
all things
on tiptoe at the edge of Time.

- Owl

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ice
Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2006-01-30 07:18 PM


Glance-Conversation-Moment-Aftermath

The linking parts of a Tryst, for sure..

The poetry inbetween the stanzas makes clear what happened....I especially liked the end stanza...kind of a blur, leaving the reader to guess what happened after the "silence"

An enjoyable read, I am enjoying your range....

_____ ___ice
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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2006-01-31 03:18 PM


Thank you so very much, ice, and thank you particularly for noticing that I have a range.  

The amazing thing is what happened after the silence - absolutely nothing!  I hope that didn't spoil the poem for you.  I can remember the disappointment for me, in spite of the years that have passed.  Anyway, at leasat I got a suite of poems out of it!

- Owl

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