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playing.with.crayons
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0 posted 2006-01-25 10:10 PM



I'm sorry
I made a mistake
I didn't mean to be like this
but now i know
my very existence was a lie.

I bled
and you laughed.
Pity you didnt know
just how much blood was spilled that night.

I fell
and you walked over me
Nothing gives you this power does it?
Nothing else in the world

Something must be wrong with me.

I cried
you said you'd dry my tears
And you did
because I died that night.

I died
and you were never sorry.

© Copyright 2006 cheye - All Rights Reserved
A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
1 posted 2006-01-27 12:57 PM


Very emotional, deep pain, you expressed it very well, for I have felt the same pain and I know where you are coming from~

~ARH

playing.with.crayons
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2 posted 2006-01-27 01:01 AM


thank you very much.... although I am POSITIVE there were more verses when I wrote it the first time. Oh well.
I hope the pain has been replaced with love and a whole truckload of chocolate.
always, xxx  

farewell the ash-tray girl

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2006-01-27 01:14 AM


I just read your reply to ARH and I too am of the opinion that chocolate can cure anything!  ~ Well, almost everything!

Hope you are well on the mend!

Here's a little insurance in case you are ever in need of a little comforting. Chocolates

I'm sorry, but after reading your poem, I felt the need for some chocolate, so there are a couple missing from the box!


EA

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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4 posted 2006-01-27 03:15 AM


I affirm AHR's and EA's opinion regarding chocolate.  It has helped me through the greater part of my life.   ...jo
ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
5 posted 2006-01-27 09:58 AM


Could not leave these words unspoken ....
        too deep to cover, to sure to hide

        though chocolate is magical, exceptance
        and understanding is the best medicine


Ct

playing.with.crayons
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6 posted 2006-01-29 06:10 AM


yes chocolate is quite beautiful. thank your for that divine box!
Yes I am well on the mend now, although I believe the whole ordeal helped my poetic develeopment somewhat. It was very important for me to write. more so than breathing.
thank your for all your lovely, lovely replies. You are all beautiful. xx

farewell the ash-tray girl

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7 posted 2006-01-29 10:15 AM


I know this feeling too well, not to take this poem to my little library.....where it will be either a razor blade or bandaid, and I won't know which until afterward.

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