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Ode to the Santa Ana Wind
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Ode to the Santa Ana Wind |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Ode to Santa Ana Wind Past the floating raft ahoy drifts the wind with leaf and wade of power churned a feather to the froth Dreamed in buckets wealth of stars the dark pool weeps the minutes and absorbs the richness of the cool into the sky of open meter Fast the time drains and cloud is gone pushed to the other side of reason until the shroud is lifted from the air and the color true is left there Can you see the length of tulle blue unraveled in the sky the city watches amazed that in the alleys and doorways the litter could be blown away so even the clean line of mountains seen when just yesterday there only haze remained |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I was just breezing throu...nice poem!  |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Your ode blew my way and I enjoyed. Joyce |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
even the clean line of mountains seen when just yesterday there only haze remained I experienced this recently... not the Santa Anas *S*... but sudden clarity where I'm used to seeing smog... I was suddenly in an entirely different place... and reminded how sad it is that we're so used to pollution that its absence is a surprise. *S* Excellent write! *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ You do it up so eloquently ... PAR ! I was there, in Fountain Valley once, when the Santa Ana winds came cavorting about ... it was brutally hot ...~ Ever tried to go to a (I think you all call them Swap Meets) to one of those selling places ... It' was soooooo hot that bottled water and little battery operated fans were the biggest thing selling? LOL ... I can honestly tell you that this Florida gal, in the throes of thousands of people, too off her blouse ... and sported around in her red bra for the rest of the day !!! LOL ... didn't know ANY of the crowd ... and after all, it's CALIFORNIA !!  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge/sis....LOL...I'm shocked!!! But laughing my self silly! This wind isn't one of the hot ones...allthough it's not exactly cold either. It's 76 degrees here right now. I love these winds because they make everything look so beautiful and clean, but they're no good when there are fires around. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I am always in awe when I read your poetry. It has a real presence about it. You transport me to a detailed setting every time, but still allow my imagination to wander. Such a gift! miscellanea |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie A good wind not only baths my skin but clears my head. Enjoyed  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"Can you see the length of tulle blue unraveled in the sky the city watches amazed that in the alleys and doorways the litter could be blown away" This is how, ladies and gentlemen....this is how. Read. Learn. Write better. If you can learn to paint a scene in this kind of color and movement (I hope to learn, so should you), you are a poet indeed. Now, about that red bra.....and a park I see daily.....!!! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent as always dear Martie!  *Still giggling here at Marge and her red bra* Sending hugs on the wind your way, Nancy~ In the midst of winter, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Can you see the length of tulle blue unraveled in the sky the city watches amazed that in the alleys and doorways the litter could be blown away so even the clean line of mountains seen when just yesterday there only haze remained your just way to beautiful |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartiSis~ I've come back to this one ... simply because Ed is SO RIGHT ... you are to be learned~  quote:  Mile High ... Eagle Eye !  Frederick's of Hollywood would be pleased ! I was going to say thanks, cause I needed a lift today ... but that's what the red bra is for !! Thankee~ *Huglets* ~*Me ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ Email - noles1@totcon.com |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well... I read. *S* And I even learn... it's the writing better that's so impossible to achieve. *S* That you make it look so easy and effortless just makes it all the more impressive... *S* Speaking of impressive... I would have paid good money to see Marge in that red bra! LOL |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie, your poetry always lifts the haze of from our every days ~ in so many ways. You give clarity and meaning to being.  Sending you a big hug-o-love, Linda |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You are one of a kind like every thing you see and describe, including the wind - tulle blue indeed ... see! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Martie, you sure have a way with words and odes! Makes me want to experience those winds. ...jo |
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Katerie Member
since 2006-01-27
Posts 92Central New York |
That's really neat. Your meter is fit for the content, and the last two lines fit beautifully, and achieve the full effect. |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
What a great poem. I enjoyed every line. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Past the floating raft ahoy drifts the wind with leaf and wade of power churned a feather to the froth" Powerful work. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
great poetry Martie - I am sorry I missed this before - whjo knows where my mind was when I was looking - you are tops - Paul |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Some day, I shall relate to you the story of when my mother was traveling down south during the time of the Santa Ana's...and coming out of San Gabriel pass, her car was nearly stopped in its tracks by the sheer force of the winds throught the passes.... Oh, I guess I just did.... I never tire of hearing of the Santa Ana Winds, Martie...so keep coming up with more. By the way, isn't it about time for a duet?  |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
This seems to be a kind of metaphor for change as well as a description of beauty seen. Enjoyed. Kristabell |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Very Beautiful |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I want to borrow your sight, Martie. Just for one hour . . . |
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