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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2006-01-21 05:22 PM



Rachel had always raised her head when no-one was looking
She dreamed of a life without stalking
Head always down backside tucked in
Head cut short
Crawl don’t begin
Rachel dreamed of wheat loaf forming a house for herself
Minute in her size fitting into her house
Next door neighbour probably a mouse
Who snuffle whiskers around her windows
Tadpole always wanted too much
And sticky
Was his touch

Her own door bright red
And soft
Her own bed
Of clean
Where her dream
Would seek other dreams
But Rachel never will be seen
For she exists in our own dreams

Of whatever sex or creed
Race or dominance
Of belief
She will just be a dream

Calling to wisdom

Sight unseen

A lot is being said

These are some more words

Gotta find my roots man
This is just bringing me down
I need some roots man
I've gotta get out

I was there
Nothing special to see
Just belonged
That's all there is to me

Gotta find my roots man
Plain to see
Gotta give to someone
That was life to me



© Copyright 2006 Dave Page - Cirencester UK - All Rights Reserved
jody5
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since 2005-12-21
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1 posted 2006-01-21 05:31 PM


This poem spoke to me.  "she will just be a dream"  Its asmost sad. I liked it.  


garysgirl
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2 posted 2006-01-21 06:18 PM


Dave, this is good writing. Like
a story poem. I enjoyed reading it.
Hugs,
Ethel

froggy
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since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893
Michigan
3 posted 2006-01-22 11:35 AM


Again Dave your words made me smile.

:-)

Hugs

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

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