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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
We touch physically as the door slammed We touched in that earth that trapps us Desiring Feeling We sound like a sunday radio show In Something so intense That it is burnt Into the next train timetable Had I known your name Had you let me Had I not understood A yes that became a no Because I never understood either And will never know either as |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bodger...You've captured a moment in time, and very well. I was confused by the last as, and then saw that I think it's supposed to take one back to the first stanza of the poem. Am I right? |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Bravo, Bodger! What a snapshot! |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
More the confusion of a man and a woman who dont really know each other and in fragments of time overwhelmed by emotion, desire, future retreat 'as you were' Dave |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Very well put my friend. :-) Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
or...as you wish~~~ a phrase I have heard more times than I wished to  M |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Martie Inappropriate content? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Bodger...You've captured a moment in time, and very well. I was confused by the last as, and then saw that I think it's supposed to take one back to the first stanza of the poem. Am I right? There are always moments and they decorate our minds Dave I iliana -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Bravo, Bodger! What a snapshot! And at some time when I dont need to earn money I will publish every else I want to Thanks for your words Thanks Dave froggy AM Inappropriate content? Very well put my friend. :-) A bit deeper and nice to write Dave nakdthoughts Life is never what is seems If you have the time to look I always enjoy your words but wish you would take them further into the world Dave |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
enjoyed My spirit will rise |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
Seems you've froze on the moment |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"nakdthoughts Life is never what is seems If you have the time to look I always enjoy your words but wish you would take them further into the world Dave" Dave, I am not exactly sure what you mean...but I do enjoy reading yours. M |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Nice read. |
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