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Pygmalion

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Huan Yi
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0 posted 01-21-2006 11:55 AM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Huan Yi



Yes
I could paint
This blank with subtle color
Limn such lines with tones of light
That even Adam in his tomb would sigh

Pen poetic words
As would cause white knights
To ride their steeds upon a tabula rasa
Build Camelot atop a barren hill

And when Ive done
Putting form to stone
One might dream about the moon
And see an evening star

Yet how can an artist not a fool
Alone without the help of gods
Beyond his talent then become enthralled
With who in fact was never there


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[This message has been edited by Huan Yi (01-21-2006 12:46 PM).]

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1 posted 01-24-2006 11:32 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

This poem -- and the comments that follow during the ensuing three days -- is the clearest example I have ever seen, of a work demonstrating its own thesis.

What do I think of it? I think it should be required reading...every poet seeking entry here should have to read it, and give a synopsis of what it means and why it might have been written, before being allowed to participate here. If it were, this would be a smaller, but much better, site.

Read this poem twice, folks, and be certain you understand...because in it a poetic genius has spoken truth to you.

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RedStoneEB
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2 posted 01-25-2006 04:50 AM       View Profile for RedStoneEB   Email RedStoneEB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RedStoneEB's Home Page   View IP for RedStoneEB

I still think your trying to be a poet instead of been a poet your still searching for the perfect style perfect form putting ideas down that ain't complete
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on the threshold of a dream


3 posted 01-26-2006 09:46 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Yet how can an artist not a fool
Alone without the help of gods
Beyond his talent then become enthralled
With who in fact was never there

Oh, wow. *S* Ratleader is right... this should be required reading... even if reading it does leave me dumbstruck. *S* Superb write!!
Drauntz
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4 posted 04-23-2007 01:23 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

cover again with color white and tell me that this is the end of the story.

beautiful poem.
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