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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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Yes I could paint This blank with subtle color Limn such lines with tones of light That even Adam in his tomb would sigh Pen poetic words As would cause white knights To ride their steeds upon a tabula rasa Build Camelot atop a barren hill And when I’ve done Putting form to stone One might dream about the moon And see an evening star Yet how can an artist not a fool Alone without the help of gods Beyond his talent then become enthralled With who in fact was never there . [This message has been edited by Huan Yi (01-21-2006 12:46 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This poem -- and the comments that follow during the ensuing three days -- is the clearest example I have ever seen, of a work demonstrating its own thesis. What do I think of it? I think it should be required reading...every poet seeking entry here should have to read it, and give a synopsis of what it means and why it might have been written, before being allowed to participate here. If it were, this would be a smaller, but much better, site. Read this poem twice, folks, and be certain you understand...because in it a poetic genius has spoken truth to you. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
I still think your trying to be a poet instead of been a poet your still searching for the perfect style perfect form putting ideas down that ain't complete |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yet how can an artist not a fool Alone without the help of gods Beyond his talent then become enthralled With who in fact was never there Oh, wow. *S* Ratleader is right... this should be required reading... even if reading it does leave me dumbstruck. *S* Superb write!! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
cover again with color white and tell me that this is the end of the story. beautiful poem. |
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