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Oblivion |
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mighty mouth Junior Member
since 2006-01-05
Posts 24Missouri, USA |
The poet tells the story that The crowd refuses to hear. The future is coming quickly and You may have something to fear. With each one who doesn’t read great works We take the chance of falling behind. Our stature is diminishing fast, And our power grows harder to find. No one take us seriously, Not even our own generation. How will we succeed again To make ourselves a stronger nation? We have lost what made us great, And no one seems to care. We will keep slipping down into oblivion And hope that someone else will be there. |
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elpoeta Junior Member
since 2006-01-17
Posts 15Puerto Rico |
I can only hope that the demise you speak of only exists within the context of your poem. It is a sad truth that we encounter and you so very well expressed. Good Stuff! Mike |
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mighty mouth Junior Member
since 2006-01-05
Posts 24Missouri, USA |
Actually, I am not sure how I feel about the topic. I was in a lecture and that topic was mentioned. This was how sad it made me feel to think about it. I just penned the words as they came to me. Thanks for the positive response! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
“Poetry is a mug’s game” T. S. Eliot |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
loved the ending... "We will keep slipping down into oblivion And hope that someone else will be there" Not where I expected it to go, but what a clever way to get there... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Good write! |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
very cool writing  ~ JW In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil-the adv |
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wanderingin Junior Member
since 2006-02-03
Posts 39 |
I agree with steavenr, very nice ending. There's hope with writers like you. Keep your passion! |
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poetry_queen Member
since 2006-02-02
Posts 94england, |
really like this |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Excellent mighty mouth! "No one take us seriously, Not even our own generation. How will we succeed again To make ourselves a stronger nation?" Good question. |
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