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CRK220888
New Member

since 2006-01-18

Posts 6

0 posted 2006-01-18 02:13 PM

Once asked I was if I'd ever seen the rain
I answered Yes
for
It came in torrents upon my world
Turning gladstone into slabs of pain
this rain
Washed all the leaves off the trees
Gold, green, Red, all swept away from their high perch
Once They overlooked my earth
Now they lay lost and discarded
All that rain the rain left is a bare tree
that
Serves as a reminder of what once was

Questioned I was of this
The answer I gave...
The leaves were my feelings
The tree my heart
Bare and a mark of sorrow
reminding me of what once was
what the rain left me
of what once was
that no longer is

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2006-01-18 02:31 PM

CRK~
Welcome to PiP !

This is a lovely heart-felt render of tender thoughts~

Enjoy browsing around and reading the thoughts of our many poetic friends~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

CRK220888
New Member

since 2006-01-18

Posts 6

2 posted 2006-01-18 02:47 PM

Thanks Marge!

I love your signature

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2006-01-18 03:31 PM

Thanks ... I'm sure we're going to love seeing more of your poetry too~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2006-01-18 03:50 PM

I agree. More please.

mighty mouth
Junior Member

since 2006-01-05

Posts 24
Missouri, USA

5 posted 2006-01-18 03:54 PM

what a post. welcome to piptalk!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2006-01-18 03:59 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

7 posted 2006-01-18 04:29 PM

This is a great first post! I only wish I could have written it first.
lol

Welcome to PIP!!!!!!

"...and as we drift along, I never fail to be astounded by the things we'll do for promises..."
Ronnie James Dio
www.impressionsintime.net

CRK220888
New Member

since 2006-01-18

Posts 6

8 posted 2006-01-18 04:41 PM

I really appreciate the comments. This was actually my first real stab at writing a poem. I'll be sure to contribute some more, both replies and new poems!!!

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

9 posted 2006-01-18 07:28 PM

Your first stab at poetry well im envious because it was wonderful and you are a natural it would seem. Have a great time here at pip we all love it here.

Julie

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