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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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I don't miss her as much now that I am near these velvet mournings and the frozen tracks of their trains when they pretend to be the wolves with wet voices emptying in the hollow windows of a dampened sky and I have made friends here too with the dancing of branches on the eves of the stones with their brittle sounds just before the breaking comes and the gasps of lifeless or so it would seem their sound, paints their graveled skin with miles of laconicisms smileless, but poetically stoic _______________ dark |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"I don't miss her as much now that I am near these velvet mournings and the frozen tracks of their trains" I have missed your poetry, DS!! It's very good to read your words this morning.  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Made me feel at peace actually, even in that desolate landscape which fuels your muse. Velvet mornings, wish I had written that. Beautifully sad, Mr. Dark. Just how I like 'em. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dark~ Hoping you can hear the *sigh* that this gentle heart emitted at the read of this tender render of you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lady pipsters..ms martie, ms littlewing and ms marge...thanks to you for the peek in the window. You bless me with your eyes and tender place whispers, thanks to each of you. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
There is a whisper of peace and acceptance in these words that on can feel....wonderful writing....**big hugs** |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
 My spirit will rise |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
You paint such a vivid picture, Stranger and I love the title. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks to all of you for the time you spend sorting thoughts from my oblivian |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Sorting thoughts from your oblivion leaves me tracing the frozen tracks of velvet mourings and wishing for the dance of pink cherry blossoms instead of branches dancing brittle...albeit, they last no longer in the breath of a breeze. A sound of wolves howling in the hollows of morning seems unbearably foreboding and lonely. I'm moved by the very intense imagery and evocative use of metaphor in this write. ~ Karen ~ |
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Air Goddess Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 108Canada |
"I don't miss her as much now" made me feel happy.... and then sad as the poem unfurled with so much loneliness and then happy again as I read..... "Smileless but poetically stoic" I enjoyed! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
klassy one...thank you for the walk with here...it is behind windows really. _________________ goddess air...it was pages turning witn the wind...and now another book is read and written..thank you for the eyes lady |
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