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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2006-01-18 12:58 PM



Father fishes a river
That flows under a bridge
A train passes over
Its whistle sounds

North of a road
That leads into town
To one side the house
Where a young woman lives

Autumn has colored
The leaves of the trees
How I see them
Through separate years

The sun sets slowly
In the western sky

Reeds rustle softly
A night bird sings



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ice
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1 posted 2006-01-18 04:42 AM


A poem that teases at all the senses...

enjoyed

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2 posted 2006-01-18 08:56 AM


John~
Such a serene word scene~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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The Lady
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3 posted 2006-01-19 11:11 PM



Excellent and so tightly written.



OwlSA
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4 posted 2006-01-20 01:59 PM


This is about as perfect as a poem can get.  

I really needed this and will re-read it many, many times, especially when stress tries to get the better of me.

- Owl

Martie
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5 posted 2006-01-20 02:05 PM


Very serene!!
Drauntz
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6 posted 2007-04-23 01:00 PM


the best time to learn fishing
from father
but "I" looked around
and dreaming.

very nice poem.

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