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Alchemy -for the masquerade challenge
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Alchemy -for the masquerade challenge |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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volatile a bonfire takes patience when I bring you this wood all dry and ready and you want just one small fricative match to ignite your tender tinder there’s no vanity in my waiting while you pretend to primp the stack and small flamings hesitate biding their phlogistic time until your burning begins in a wet smokiness kindling until the glowings won’t damp down because the logs have begun to settle in the heat, and the fire has tendered its slow ultimatum |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Some folks can't be imitated....they're just too unique. But that shouldn't keep us from trying! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Ed, Well, I like it . . . John |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
see a little maree in this but then i though kaoru? an excellent write regardless of whom the subject is. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
hmm could be a few, this is terrific Ed... I see Martie, and I see Cpat. time will tell eh? Great work from you as usual m'friend Mxx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ed, I'm almost afraid to guess. It could be any of those mentioned above, but I think it is either Ford, or Icebox, in that order. Beautiful writing!  ...jo |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Hmmm... I'm stuck; maybe it is Cpat. Great writing regardless of who you are masquerading. Enjoyed. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gosh, I see wranx in this . . . its beautiful, Ed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 I had to look up phlogistic, and I shoulda known that one, Ed--because I AM that one!  But this is a wonder of work, and I can only hazard a guess, and since I have no clue whatsoever, I will say... Ron Carnell! (When I shoot for the moon in a guess, I really shoot for the moon, eh?) But might I add that whomever you styled this after, it certainly does suit you.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Alas that I have done my work so poorly....some people I'd truly like to write in tune with, but....not my intended victim! I especially hope someone comes up with it, because it appears that I won't be able to be here for a while....and going out with a bit of success would be heartening. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
What about the Local Reb? |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Or Gempop? I give up, Ed...there are so many good poets here. This is a fabulous poem and a tribute to whomever it be! until your return......jo |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I'm pretty sure that this is Logan. Some don't know him because he hasn't been here for such a long time....but the campfire was a giveaway. You did good on thisun, Ed. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
It is a good write. I have been building fires with frozen wet wood all weekend. Each one takes on a life of its own. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Me too, but this fire seems not to have taken hold very well....still no success in my little charade....sigh....I really blew this one I guess! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...it doesn't matter that no one guessed...the fun is in the guessing, even if the guess is wrong. You gonna tell, or leave us stranded? Or, should I guess again? |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Pulling my hair out trying to figure this out. You've gotta tell us! Could it be iliana or passing shadows? Great poem! miscellanea |
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mighty mouth Junior Member
since 2006-01-05
Posts 24Missouri, USA |
This is a very interesting post. Rather unusual for me, but still fun. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ed, are you leaving us for a while? Was this a John inspired write? or LeeJ? (from the content, not necessarily the style) LOL, I burn my stuff up all the time, so I enjoyed that neat word, phlogistic. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I definitely know whose writing you are emulating! ~ Mine! lol Indeed, I do flatter myself! Seriously speaking, this may be trite but it's true, whomever's style you are writing in ~ I likeee! I do feel that it is a man. ~ Ice??? Linda |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
RatL, I know you said no one has guessed correctly yet, but I still think think sounds like Ford. I'm dying to know. There are so many good poets here...sometimes it is just too hard to know all their styles. Don't be discouraged! It could be you're writing yourself....it is that good! ...jo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Actually I think it's pretty kewl that nobody has guessed it...especially since I dropped in such obvious hints in everything from theme to word choice...... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 It's Serenity, she knows those big words  because she reads all darn day! Great job Ed. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Noop, I was a hair's breadth from tryin' her on for size, but instead I chose- ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm thinking the vocabulary is the key... both to whom it is and is NOT imitating... or maybe it's the smoulder? *G* You know I hate guessing games... so... am I on the right track? LOL Even if I'm not... this is superb work... any poet would be honored to be mimiced with such style. *S* |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok we have this much: it is not Raph, Gem, Kaoru, Wranx, John, Cpat, Karen, Martie, Maree, Ford, icebox, Ron C, Reb, Logan, iliana, Dixie, or Lee. I would say this calls for a prize then. *grin* These are the parts where the poet breathes, no matter who it us, Ed, this is outstanding. It read to me like many fine writers here. fricative match to ignite your tender tinder phlogistic time until your burning begins in a wet smokiness kindling until the glowings won’t damp down slow ultimatum Is this Mr. Dark? [This message has been edited by littlewing (01-16-2006 11:12 AM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ta-DA!!!!! Man, is that guy ever hard to copy! ....fellas, if you want a real challenge, but one that just might bring you some, um, extrinsic rewards....try writing a poem in the Dark Stranger style....I dare ya! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ed, you will be missed around here. I hope you aren't gone long. ...jo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I haven't entirely decided. PiP is a hard place for me to be sometimes, and lately I've been thinking it would be better for me if I didn't come here anymore, at least for a while. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Of course, I understand the need to leave, but please don't make it permanent. The site has lost too many of its best authors. And more than that, you're a key member, few contribute as much as you do. Whether posting, replying or supporting others new and old, the loss would be heavily felt. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Raph, you just made my choice for me. How can I possibly walk away from this place? So, friends of mine, bear with me...I may not be here a lot, but I will find a way to be here at least a little....and what I write, I'll post. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
omg, i see him NOW....You wrote him perfectly Ed, I don't know how i didn't pick him earlier. shame on me glad your stayin too  mxx oh Library. how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Yes shame on us all, you did a fine job, had to pick out the delicacies of the write to see. And I understand not being here all the time, but don't you dare go. Like Raph said, way too many good writers have already gone. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Ed, Where to begin? In order of importance, I'm glad you've decided to stay. I did a quick refresh on Darrk ( who has been here quite some time also ) and, I believe you've echoed his style as closely as possible. I don't think I'm up to the challenge myself, I certainly wouldn't want to offend anyone with a botched job, as I've probably offended enough people around here already by not replying or commenting nearly enough. Well, it's a new year, who knows. Thanks for being Ed. Doc |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Just made my day, thanks for hanging around Ed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You did DS, and yourself, a flavor, here... don't be long gone, Sir.... or we will have to start imitating you. And that will be just as hard for us, as this was, for you. Excellent work... Style worthwhile. |
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