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Limbo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Limbo is closing up shop Going out of business after so many years Not, so much, a victim of downsizing As it is of corporate restructuring Its function has been deemed redundant If not unnecessary, altogether The angels in charge Have been offered early retirement And their assistants Reassigned to desk jobs in Purgatory The card room is dark and The great hall is now nearly empty The clamor and hubbub Replaced by echoing footfalls And the sound Of one lonely broom, sweeping The last of the residents are drifting away And we’ll have to forgive them For not at all understanding That they are in Limbo, no longer |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Playing with words, Ed? I love it!!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
wranx, you never cease to stir my thoughts! This one made me sit right up in my chair! ....jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
We, here in New Orleans, have yet to receive the memo.  But then, history forgotten repeats itself I guess: "The Battle of New Orleans, also known as the Battle of Chalmette Plantation, took place on January 8, 1815, during the War of 1812, when the United States forces defeated the British. The Treaty of Ghent, which ended the war, had been signed over two weeks earlier, but the news had not yet reached the battle-front." Until then, I guess we'll just dance.  limbo little lower now  But you are right in one regard--the rest of the place might look like hell, but I have decided my room is gonna be FABULOUS! nod I think we ultimately decide when to clean out the desk.  |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
Very interesting write most likely read more of your work |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
very nice write, with such wonderful words, keep up the awesome poetry. Poetry can get you very far |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
oooh it made me think (ouch)... I like the way you brought this to the last line  and then He created the horse... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oooh i love it when you come out to play m'bro...always sending my mind into a spin. babem xx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more ~Neruda~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
*smiling at you from here* I adore this and you know why. God, I have missed your words. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx You talking about limbo or a bimbo. LOL |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Very clever, as usual. The image of the sweeping broom is equally beautiful as it is effective (not that every word of every poem you write isn't!). It will stay with me a long time. - Owl |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Bravo!!! I think that is all I can say... words have escaped me |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey wranx....F A B U L O U S! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your poems are of the ilk that keep playing in my mind's eye and re-experienced on a gut level. Your poetry is hypnotizing and yet it can stimulate one's mind. Linda |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think for serenity I should repost my version of Chalmette Field... and as for you, Wranx, Limbo was the last 48 hours, when I wasn't sure if my 12 year old puppy was going to come home.... now that her heartbeat has returned to these walls, I don't know limbo any longer, either. Thank you for this  , this day. |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
Purgatory will soon follow. ::smiles:: ::bows:: |
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