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Paper Tiger Member
since 2003-09-28
Posts 77
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I wandered from my mind, almost instinctively, and began to casually drift; with no thoughts to guide me, naked and unadorned, my only recourse was acceptance, and terror did not possess me. I shut my eyes, and all around me were unfamiliar hills begging to be discovered; and everything seemed transcending. And I realized that it was faith that permitted me there; where fear had once been now only I lingered. And I was able to press on: What was to come did not concern me, and nothing determined my path. I didn't write anything in 2005, so to already have completed a poem this year is very gratifying. If you have any ideas for a title, let me know. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
enjoyed this very insightful and positive read..faith is our human need, for without faith, nothing else ever seems right.... well done composition... |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
Each line wants you to read the next its like a good book you want to know the ending good write |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I liked this just the way it is -- keep that faith; hope to see more!  ...jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Mind wanderings" ~ "Naked and Unadorned" ~ "Transcending" ~ "Transcendence" I was having fun coming up with some titles for your "Untitled"!  Enjoyed the read! I'm glad that you are back! ~ and that you are writing again! May 2006 be a wonderfully creative year for you! EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (01-12-2006 07:15 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ooops! Been there! Done that! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Title suggestions: "Where Fear Had Once Been" "Unfamiliar Hills" ------------------------------ Whatever you decide to title it, its an awesome write! Will look for more from you! hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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Paper Tiger Member
since 2003-09-28
Posts 77 |
I value all of your posts, and thanks to Earth Angel and dgvarner for the title suggestions; "Unfamiliar Hills" really has a ring to it. I really do hope 2006 is a better year for poetry. I became extremely self-deprecating during the course of 2005, and thought that I would never write again. I was extremely hesitant to post this poem, but the response has been elevating. Thank you. Life is wasted on the living. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
alright you, pop a title on this puppy and get some more readers/replies/feedback ..  hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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mighty mouth Junior Member
since 2006-01-05
Posts 24Missouri, USA |
this is so powerful. i appreciate the conciseness and strength. I very much like the title too. Welcome back to writing, by the way. I once gave it up and have found it so spiritual to pick it up again. I hope the same happens for you. |
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Paper Tiger Member
since 2003-09-28
Posts 77 |
"Unfamiliar Hills" is the title I've decided to go with (thanks again, dgvarner). I'm not sure if I'm completely satisfied with the poem; there are a few lines I'm still mulling over. But, overall, I'm convinced it's my best work to date. Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream by night. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
I like it ask a moderator to "re-title" it for you...you get more readers with a title  take care-- hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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Fee Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 381Melbourne, Australia |
I feel as though I walked with you through the tails of your mind. Nicely written. Hugs, Fee Expressions, |
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