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davidmerriman
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0 posted 2006-01-12 04:24 AM


somewhere traveled
(In Homage to e.e. cummings, for Nicole)

too young, they say, to close up yet
yet yet it was you who took down
that first button like a petal, and now
life aches to shut itself (like cold windows or
a blanket returning to its place when
its body has abandoned it) to clasp down
suddenly, as when the heart of a flower
imagines the snow carefully everywhere
descending, down, down, littering everything.
i would be entwined only in you, littered
only in the tinniest hands, smaller, even,
than rain or doubt or all i know

© Copyright 2006 David Merriman - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2006-01-12 06:55 AM


we realize we are so small and love once understood, is so emmense and profound....
beautifully articulated

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just out of reach
2 posted 2006-01-12 08:44 AM


delicate and lovely~
Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Martie
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3 posted 2006-01-12 03:02 PM


"descending, down, down, littering everything.
i would be entwined only in you, littered
only in the tinniest hands, smaller, even,
than rain or doubt or all i know"

Achingly beautiful!

Dominique-Simone
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4 posted 2006-01-12 03:35 PM


Beautiful... You really have captured a moment in this
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5 posted 2006-01-12 03:36 PM


"life aches to shut itself"
chillingly beautiful write

OwlSA
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6 posted 2006-01-12 04:02 PM


Exquisitely crafted.  Thank you for the pleasure of reading this.  You have done ee cummings proud.

- Owl

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