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Remembering Richard
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Remembering Richard |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Perhaps you’re dead. This would explain your prolonged absence – and why you ghost me now. Your choice would be death by woman – any one of a long list, a strand, knotted and tied apart, slung over your back, a rosary to finger. She would be like me, pushed to the deed by your constant cultivation of insecurities, and those leavings of infidelities. We’ll always have the Shangri-la night in Santa Monica, with that window on the third floor and phosphorescent views; crazies screaming up at us from the boardwalk; you breaking my fall in air minus ions. We might meet again and laugh about this someday: two friends smiling over clouds while you pour me a clear drink and lure me into fire. [This message has been edited by Corinne (01-13-2006 04:53 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A long, long, VERY long time ago I had a Richard in my life... but he wasn't nearly as flammable as this. Well done, Corinne. Always good to see your thoughts...  . |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Thought it was a very interesting poem,I liked it alot,thanks ....paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dang, but this is awesome.....and I do love the ending lines...PERFECT!!!! Thanx Corr. You really dropped a great one on us.... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Great writing, Corinne! ...jo |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"two friends smiling over clouds, while you pour me a clear drink and lure me into fire." Impressive work. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
two friends smiling over clouds, while you pour me a clear drink and lure me into fire How funny Lady how we like the same lines... Anyway, great job Corrine this poem sends a strong message |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
simply adore your work, excellent |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
two friends smiling over clouds, while you pour me a clear drink and lure me into fire tremendous...adding if I may, be very very careful.... amazing write |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you all very much! I feel this one still needs work, though, it's a little bit too much of a rant, needs to be tempered. Corinne |
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