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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643
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Giving up not usually what I do but the bills have piled up like the bible preaching about responsibility what does that matter, if you live only half as long? everyday stale bread sits in my kitchen as I wonder what groceries to buy he used to tell me “No hands on the walls, no crumbs on the table” ‘cause that is what’s really important; but I kind of like the way each crumbs sits patiently waiting for the conversation to get interesting. Making room for company the couch rests lethargically no one could tell it to move. I thought about going you know to that place I can’t pronounce yet money laughed at me today asking if I could be any funnier but you see I never thought that I had to do it you know live hard cause they really never tell you the important things “keep things clean” what about real life? |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
I love all the personification in this one. Good write. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Excellent poem Dominique. "but I kind of like the way each crumbs sits patiently waiting for the conversation to get interesting." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...reminded me of that song..."In The Real World" the guy doesn't always get the girl...James |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you all... It is the responses that inspire me |
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weepingwillow Junior Member
since 2006-01-09
Posts 33Sin City-Las Vegas |
Flash backs...Love You |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, I do understand. You have a very unique way of saying things. Good write.  and hang in there, jo |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
one heck of a write !! man alive this was a gritty real poem , i like your work ~wolfie " the only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams " - tupac shakur |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
thank you again, You all have made me feel so welcome |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I like the way you open up in your poems, especially this one. Enjoyed, and I can relate to this. I too didn't know it could happen to me. - Owl |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
my favorite line... "each crumbs sits patiently waiting for the conversation to get interesting". Neat phrasing...good write. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thanks again... Yeah life sucks sometimes but hey we do what we can with it. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
This is a fine piece. I love the way it express what you feel...think. It gives the reader a glimpse into your heart. Bravo! Very well done...and keep up the fine work. This is an excellent poem. |
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