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Open Poetry #37

Lifeless...

weepingwillow
Junior Member

since 2006-01-09

Posts 33
Sin City-Las Vegas

0 posted 2006-01-10 10:32 PM

A tainted soul, frosted
Inside the freezer of a heart grown sour
Petrefied, hardened like wood
No emotions can get through

With simple elementary words
I try,to entice you
Hypnotically asking you, to show
Emotions
Entranced you blankly feel
Mannequin in a store front window

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

1 posted 2006-01-11 08:34 PM

The last line is very powerful

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2006-01-11 10:52 PM

Powerful work.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2006-01-12 03:36 AM

WOW!

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

4 posted 2006-01-12 04:54 AM

excellent!

~hugs~

Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

5 posted 2006-01-12 05:28 AM

so real !

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2006-01-12 06:54 PM

I used to be like this...many years ago...and I know a few today...James

weepingwillow
Junior Member

since 2006-01-09

Posts 33
Sin City-Las Vegas

7 posted 2006-01-13 08:02 AM

Thank you...

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

8 posted 2006-02-17 10:57 AM

nicely written..

yes, that last line is a good one!

hugs, g

"We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron

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