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whisperings in a dull roar |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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How the natives pound the drums readying for war at five the sirens never seem to stop car doors sound like big bang bombs Who goes there? Ye friend or foe? and how the hell am I to know when all of them are smiling? Perhaps I'll simply shoot them all and let the gods split differences It doesn't seem to matter much perspectives *note--reality - besides my life is just a quote elliptical and I survived by hiding parenthetical an afterthought of what I wrote-- emphasized itallically... punctuated much too much (and can a comma count as beat?) No one's ever answered me except for Emily and she is dead but for the words she'd hid beneath her bed--she must have known that history is deemed by men busying themselves. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I've lost count of how many times I've had to pick myself up off the floor *grin* Perhaps now... it's yur turn M'lady lol Sighhh you leave me speechless I love you M xx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This is incredibly good, I like the two end lines, in some ways they are mundane enough to enahnce the rest of the poem and make it extraordinary. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This reminded me of a quote she made once, "'Tis better to be the hammer than the anvil."  School gets out way to early when you are somewhat dead tard and maybe have a headache doesn't it?  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, We are buried twice, first by inconsequents.  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Karen? Come here....  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
You make me think too hard.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
In agreement with Larry... thinking too hard now. But love the insight into your soul, as always  and then He created the horse... |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This is an interesting write good job |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Emily, is dead and gone and buried in green and gossamer. You, on the other hand, are ablaze with life. I agree with Maree, this one's a keeper too. Billy 8) "Only the dead, have seen the end of war." |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I like Billy's comment there . . . all of it *nodding* and this: how the hell am I to know when all of them are smiling? Tell me about it . . . but m'Lady K? My oh my . . . your life, a quote? And get away from those parenthesis, you never needed them anyhow . . . I hope you understood that.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hey, I tried to call you about an hour ago, but the line was busy -- proof of life!!! Emily lives on through you in many ways, but you are definitely you and can't hid -- we will find you!  jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Darn, forgot to save it. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I think there was always some confusion with who is friend or foe... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow. So I lived to write another day.  coffee and thanks for reading my madness |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
oh my goodness girl, your surely add romance and remarkable prose to anyone who reads you...specifically but not limited to the courage and willfulness that lies in waiting within your soul. Greatful for this read.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love ya lady~ In the midst of winter, |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
You constantly amaze me. "besides my life is just a quote elliptical and I survived by hiding parenthetical an afterthought of what I wrote-- emphasized itallically... punctuated much too much (and can a comma count as beat?)" More please. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
"And you read your emily dickinson, And I my robert frost, And we note our place with bookmarkers That measure what we’ve lost." The Dangling Conversation - Simon and Garfunkel. What we are losing is humanity. Well written, Karen! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
None of the meds for migraine worked, so finally, in desperation, I took a vibrator to my head.  (I-know-I-am-ridiculous-and-I-do-not-give-a-damn.)It worked! (I just took a walk in the SUN and my eyes didn't water once and not so much as a thump in mah head, either) thanks for reading ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh think I'll do the same, now. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Interesting...I like hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen...Go Drink two Hurricanes and play a little Pete Fountain and you will be okay. If that doesn't work just shoot yourself...LOL...Paul Enjoyed ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Brilliant, as always! Glad you got rid of your migraine. I used to get them until I decided I didn't like them, couldn't afford the loss of time, work time, income (when I was teaching from home)and so I decided not to have any more, and I didn't - the last few that tried to get me I warded off before they got hold of me. Boy, do I understand why you capitalised SUN, when I remember the closed curtains to hide the sun when I used to have them. - Owl |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
lady, I would read your "madness" any day!! over and over....I LOVE IT seek the flame within yourself |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"...she must have known that history is deemed by men busying themselves." that was why she liked Emerson so much. *smile* |
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