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A Different Kind of Chill (Wanderlust)
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A Different Kind of Chill (Wanderlust) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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The chill challenged me to open my eyes. Letting me know by change of climate that I was close. I could always tell the difference. Each city had its own distinct personification, like a woman with her own scent. You knew she was near before you ever set eyes on her and if she were the right woman, she stirred more than your sense of smell. I wondered if anyone out there still carried the scent of me in their memory. I shook my head as if the mere motion would erase the trail of where my thoughts were taking me. Like an etch-a-sketch, hoping the more I shook, the more diminished the path to such thought became. It never worked. Thoughts of him were coming more often and more intensely these days. I sighed, reflection of the old I supposed. I wondered what happened to the usual solace found in the clatter of metal on metal. If maybe it was time to stop using the train like the safe haven of a mother’s womb. What was the point? It’d been too long and this way of life, too familiar. He had been so young; yet so brilliant in his innocence. Knowing far more than I, at eight years his senior. That first night I saw him looking it was like the fire had consumed me sending the heat pulsating through my veins. He was that beautiful and remembering brought the same flush to my face now, that it had then. Remembering the feel of him sent a different kind of chill through me. That proved more than I could handle at the moment. So I tried to concentrate on what I would do and how long I would be staying in Annapolis, and as the train rambled to a stop.. I thought I heard his voice, carried on the wind, calling my name.. “Alanna” _________________ "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling wide... I "get" it.  and this is already captivating and wonderful, and I will watch for the next installment...with hope. You two have delighted me.  |
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Anne Shiever Junior Member
since 2006-01-10
Posts 21KS/USA |
Awesome  Anne Shiever |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
me too, they should be posted together. You guys have a book on your hands, not even kidding. Please keep going . . . |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"What was the point? It’d been too long and this way of life, too familiar. He had been so young; yet so brilliant in his innocence." Is is any wonder that you inspire me Myrtle...  You make my parades dear.....no kiddin'. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
So I tried to concentrate on what I would do and how long I would be staying in Annapolis, and as the train rambled to a stop.. I thought I heard his voice, carried on the wind, calling my name.. “Alanna” ~great way to close out this cool writing, this had some meat to the story,I liked peace and passion - wolfie" the only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams " - tupac shakur |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! What a storyline! Come on Duncan....you're up next!! Excellent Susan. Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Damnation! Great, great write! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Yes, this is wonderful, alright, Susan!  ...jo |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
next installment please? OUCH! Ok . . . ok . . . |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
It's on Duncan.... I love you guys."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Thoughts of him were coming more often and more intensely these days. I sighed, reflection of the old I supposed. I wondered what happened to the usual solace found in the clatter of metal on metal. If maybe it was time to stop using the train like the safe haven of a mother’s womb. your amazing I thought I heard his voice, carried on the wind, calling my name.. “Alanna” beautifully done humorously adding...hmmmm, I remember once, while still married, hearing my husband call out in his sleep...Elise, Elise??? ...and we all know, that's not my name |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
lol beware of those brilliant innocents talk about a wonderful adventure! (vicariously enjoying the chill) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kept this for the weekend shiver... and enjoyed every chill. Go ahead... do it again. For us. "It matters not this distance now" from Yesterday's Love |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
My absolute favorite! Keeping this! Whew-this one blew me away. miscellanea |
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