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Android 17

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since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

0 posted 2006-01-10 05:34 AM

... arms around you ...
      ... arms around me ...

               ... it's returned ...

... (disguises) ...

                     ... laying low ...           ... bekoming ...

   ... the shadow that reached out from the darkness ...
... hallucinating here beside me ...
          ... giddy with glee ...

              ... it's become the voice of indecision ...

... (many faces) ...

... you all talk to me...
   ... it ...
      ... you ...
         ... them ...
   ... (me?) ...

               ... words don't seem to mean anything to anyone ...

... the language it speaks uses no words ...
     ... it's wrath is felt by all ...

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2006-01-10 07:14 PM

"... you all talk to me...
   ... it ...
      ... you ...
         ... them ...
   ... (me?) ..."

Love it, my dear, I absolutely love it

and then He created the horse...

Android 17

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since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

2 posted 2006-01-11 12:19 PM

Thanks! *snuzzle*!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2006-01-11 09:52 AM

" the language it speaks uses no words ...
... it's wrath is felt by all ... "

very interesting! I find symbolism to be the purest language and it is rather a hobby of mine. The etheric quality here is intriguing, and smile, I too, am fond of the ellipsis...

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2006-01-11 09:57 AM

whoa I loved this, can take the mind to many different places...talk about indecision?
gwad, shall I feel afraid of that shadow or meet it head on, shall I hallucinate with it, or place my arms around it? Nope, it's here, I feel it now...and I don't know what to think?

Enjoyed this emensely

Android 17

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since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

5 posted 2006-01-11 11:44 PM

Wow, thanks guys! I really loved the feedback!

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

6 posted 2006-01-12 12:02 PM

"... the language it speaks uses no words ..."

Great line!

enjoyed..
hugs, g

"We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2006-01-12 12:41 PM

I'm "speechless"! I read this poem several times and came up with a different interpretation with every one of them! You made me think!

lol

The following line literally gave me the goosebumples!

"... the shadow that reached out from the darkness ..."

Keep safe!

EA

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

8 posted 2006-01-12 05:11 PM

This is an interesting piece and makes me ponder. Have to go along with the Earth Angel, too.

...jo

RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

9 posted 2006-01-12 05:38 PM

Its amazing never seen this style done before its personalized different images flashing from each words

good write

Android 17

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since 2001-07-21

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Winnipeg

10 posted 2006-01-13 07:27 PM

Thanks for all the feedback! I'm really glad I moved from Teen Poetry :P

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