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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Orchestra of shadows echoing I see you lying on the mausoleum floor You didn't see me come in Praying to your gods Chards of yesterday Piercing your sanity Perhaps you shouldn't have lied You don't see me you never did within the candle flame why did you come here? What do you have to gain? Angels deaf to your requiem you can't love in vain nor make it go away even I became deaf to your promises you can't live in vain why did you come here? to find forgiveness amongst fallen angels? you didn't see me leave you never did If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
even I became deaf to your promises you can't live in vain why did you come here Great Job. This poem reminds me of something a friend once wrote I wish I could find it so I could show you.. Anyway it was a pleasure reading |
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weepingwillow Junior Member
since 2006-01-09
Posts 33Sin City-Las Vegas |
Nice write... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
A purgatory for men, I know the place well: You don't see me you never did  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow..I like that..great writing.. hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Whoa! This stopped me in my tracks. Powerful writing, Ceinwyn! ...jo |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Very beautiful and very sad. - Owl |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your writing just keeps on getting better, and BETTER! My goodness, girl! Whatever mood you are in when you write, you convey it very effectively. "You don't see me you never did within the candle flame" ~ Remember, Dear Kristen, you are the radiant light of a candle! Shine on, my friend! Loveya! Linda |
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